Preschool years is a crucial time period for children’s physical and mental development, and it may seem logical that government should provide financial support to ensure every children to attend preschool program. There is no doubt that establishing preschool programs will be a social welfare for both children and their family, but whether the practice is worthwhile compared with more needed things deserves to be further discussed, so I take a reserved attitude toward the claim.
Admittedly, the fund for supporting children for their preschool years help promote equity in education regardless of people’s background and social class. And some programs will have a long-term effect on their future. For example, when I was a 3-year-old child I took a educational camp during which I learned a lot of basic moral values through watching educational cartoons or playing games. These activities helped me build the sense of honesty and kindness. With these virtue deeply rooted in children’s mind, they will be less likely to be corrupted later in society and thus improving social harmony.
However, the argument are too optimistic that they ignore one important fact that government’s fund are limited and if they want to allocate more fund to pre-primary education, the money spent on other equally or more important areas may be cut. Take the college scientific research programs for example, devoting more money to pre-school program will have the risk decreasing the research fund. With less government support, the researchers may find it difficult to explore in a cutting-edge field and refuse to do further research. As a consequence, science and technology development would be greatly undermined.
Meanwhile, though there do exist some preschool programs that should be placed with top priority, most preschool programs are not so educational and important at all and they are just intended for taking care of children and having fun. Most of the preschool programs in my city are just watching TV shows, playing with lego blocks. It’s hard to say that these programs play such a significant role for children that require government support.
In a nutshell, the argument in the lecture is a little bit arbitrary and I maintain that government doesn’t need to spend more funds in support of arts instead of athletics.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 270, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...e, when I was a 3-year-old child I took a educational camp during which I learned...
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Line 2, column 469, Rule ID: THIS_NNS[2]
Message: Did you mean 'this virtue' or 'these virtues'?
Suggestion: this virtue; these virtues
...the sense of honesty and kindness. With these virtue deeply rooted in children’s mind, they ...
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Line 5, column 49, Rule ID: LITTLE_BIT[1]
Message: Reduce redundancy by using 'little' or 'bit'.
Suggestion: little; bit
...shell, the argument in the lecture is a little bit arbitrary and I maintain that governmen...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, may, so, thus, while, for example, no doubt
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 17.0 15.1003584229 113% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 28.0 43.0788530466 65% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 52.1666666667 71% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1977.0 1977.66487455 100% => OK
No of words: 375.0 407.700716846 92% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.272 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.40055868397 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8450796513 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 215.0 212.727598566 101% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.573333333333 0.524837075471 109% => OK
syllable_count: 586.8 618.680645161 95% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.59856630824 31% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 63.3286314044 48.9658058833 129% => OK
Chars per sentence: 131.8 100.406767564 131% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.0 20.6045352989 121% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.06666666667 5.45110844103 75% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.333099154931 0.236089414692 141% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.113895732901 0.076458572812 149% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.105370027445 0.0737576698707 143% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.186552805552 0.150856017488 124% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.118822643999 0.0645574589148 184% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.9 11.7677419355 135% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 58.1214874552 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.1575268817 128% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.58 10.9000537634 125% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.13 8.01818996416 114% => OK
difficult_words: 101.0 86.8835125448 116% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 18.0 10.002688172 180% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 86.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 26.0 Out of 30
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