Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Governments should spend more money in support of the arts than in support of athletics such as state-sponsored Olympic teams.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
People possess different perspectives on whether governments should spend more money in support of the arts than in support of athletics. As for me, I strongly argue that the government should spend more money in support of athletics such as state-sponsored Olympic teams. Accordingly, I provide three arguments.
First of all, I really need to save money because I am poor. If the government spends money on supporting athletics, the government will establish a lot of places for the athletes to practice and the places will be affordable. For example, in Taipei, the government spends a lot of money to build sports centers. There are a lot of sports courts in the sports center and people can enter the center to exercise with low-price tickets. To be more specific, if people want to work out in the sports center, they have to pay only 20 NT dollars, which is tenfold the price of a commercial private gym.
Secondly, I care about friends, and if the government spent money to support athletics, the TVs will play a lot of sports competitions for me and my friends to watch. That is to say when the government spends money on supporting athletics, there is more possible for athletes to attend international sports events that the TVs will definitely play and report. For example, when I was in high school, there were a lot of NBA games for me and my friends to watch together because Jeremy Lin, who comes from my country, played in the NBA at that time.
Last but not least, I am a person who cares about health. If the government spends money in support of athletics, people will be encouraged to do sports, and doing sports can keep people healthy. For example, if the government spends money on making advertisements to promote the advantages of sports, people will be aware of the importance of doing exercise. For instance, people can avoid diabetes by working out, and people can improve their heart by doing cardio.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, but, first, if, really, second, secondly, so, as for, for example, for instance, such as, first of all, that is to say
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 19.0 43.0788530466 44% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1609.0 1977.66487455 81% => OK
No of words: 335.0 407.700716846 82% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.80298507463 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.27820116611 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73502891371 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 159.0 212.727598566 75% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.474626865672 0.524837075471 90% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 475.2 618.680645161 77% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.9110742671 48.9658058833 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.266666667 100.406767564 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.3333333333 20.6045352989 108% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.73333333333 5.45110844103 160% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.267076033214 0.236089414692 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.112768435428 0.076458572812 147% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.125303042339 0.0737576698707 170% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.208459416921 0.150856017488 138% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.145346913711 0.0645574589148 225% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.3 11.7677419355 105% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 66.07 58.1214874552 114% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.86 10.9000537634 100% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.41 8.01818996416 92% => OK
difficult_words: 57.0 86.8835125448 66% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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