Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Governments should spend more money in support of the arts than in support of athletics such as state-sponsored Olympic teams. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
How the government should use their money in a different field is always a noteworthy matter when it comes on budget. There are a plethora of people content that money should devote to arts and others disagree. Not surprisingly, the number of controversies over this issue is overwhelmed. Among this controversy, I cogently prefer to support the art more than the Olympic teams. There are several reasons for holding this aspect which I will elaborate followings.
To commence with, arts is a technique which broadens an individual's mind and shows inner beauty. The human can easily characterise own's perspective by arts. Moreover, it is the foundation of society's culture and people can easily show their tradition to another by using arts. For instance, one of the artists of Bangladesh Zainul Abedin who was popular for his work of santal couple, famine series etc. He depicted every sketch to represent Bangladeshi people culture and tradition. Besides, he showed in famine series how terrible condition of Bangladeshi women. This kind of picture actually represents awareness, concerns, patrisom for the country. Recently, I showed some exhibition of Indian an artist. Though I know about India but not enough knowledge of their tradition. I learn how their culture is different from state to state, their taboo, religious ritual delight me so much.
The exquisite point is that arts are a more profitable investment than the athletics because its achievement is temporary. Moreover, to be a good artist they need to consider many things such as working environment, good equipment, an opportunity for the workshop and last is the exhibition of art to a gallery. Sometimes artist could not afford this staff and I think the government should support them. Therefore, they are not paid enough for their artwork. On the other hand, athletics are always sponsored by a different company and also paid regularly by the government.
To recapitulate, to explore more inner beauty, knowledge and represent own's country art is one of the major metaphors of skill. I personally believe that government should raise more awareness for this sector to reinforce art.
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Suggestion:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, besides, but, if, moreover, so, therefore, for instance, i think, kind of, such as, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 32.0 43.0788530466 74% => OK
Preposition: 38.0 52.1666666667 73% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 8.0752688172 211% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1829.0 1977.66487455 92% => OK
No of words: 349.0 407.700716846 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.24068767908 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32221490584 4.48103885553 96% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.83835150669 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 202.0 212.727598566 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.578796561605 0.524837075471 110% => OK
syllable_count: 573.3 618.680645161 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 29.5288414832 48.9658058833 60% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.1363636364 100.406767564 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.8636363636 20.6045352989 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.31818181818 5.45110844103 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.191551209555 0.236089414692 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0511229158438 0.076458572812 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0655628367833 0.0737576698707 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.127952302248 0.150856017488 85% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0678144671783 0.0645574589148 105% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 11.7677419355 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.25 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.82 10.9000537634 118% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.81 8.01818996416 110% => OK
difficult_words: 98.0 86.8835125448 113% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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