The Do you Agree or Disagree the with at The following Statement?
It IS of Better for Children to the Choose Jobs that are Similar to Their Parents 'Jobs Within last to the Choose Jobs that are Very Different from Their Parents' the Job.
The Use specific Reasons and examples to Support your answer.
Our jobs play a pivotal role in our lives. Some people believe that it is much better for their kids to follow their parents' steps and work the same jobs for them. In contrary, others disagree. The think that not all kids enthused with their family's business. In fact, the might be talented and would love to build their future on their own. As far as I am concerned, I agree with the first position. I think the opportunity of being employed for our generation and our future generation are getting harder day after day; it is essential for those children to get the financial support from their parent without any struggle. Also, if they are talented in something, their parents are the best teacher for the available business and protecting their hobby. And, they are responsible for keeping their parents' names for the next generation. Following is a brief interpretation of my perspective.
First of all, we live in a very competitive community. These days, there are more than ten thousand young fresh graduated adults willing to find their positions and place what they studied into practice. On the other hand, our economic depression and the expensive lifestyle forces many of those young men to struggle a lot, till finding the best chance of their career. The question that asks itself, if their parents are around them and are capable of taking care of them financially, why they do not work with them? I believe that following their fathers and their mothers' steps would make their recent and their future life easier. For example, my uncle has a very famous Chinese restaurant in the city. After fifty years of building that restaurant's reputation, his kids are running that business from generation to generation. In this way, those families support each other, still connected, and strengthen their roots in the area.
Secondly, I think if the family have a child who loves their parent's job, he/she would be lucky. Our parents are the best teachers in everything. In fact, no one like your father or your mother in override your weakness. Furthermore, it is a misconception to assume that if those kids have a hobby or are talented, their parents' job will destroy them. They can use their talented hobby and work happily. A good example for that is my uncle's restaurant, too. As I said, he has four children who run his business now. One of those kids are very smart in technology, and computer, other is a painter. Both of them used their talent primary their family business. The first one creates an excellent website about the restaurant, and use a magical music with colors inside the eatery which create a fantastic touch for the customers. While, the painter man change the decoration of the entire building. In this way, they found the job and did not need to give up their hobbies.
Last but not the least, I think that our children are responsible for protecting our name in the future. Whether have a business or have a regular job; they play a crucial part in raising our name and make us proud of them. For instance, my father is a pharmacist at CVS retail pharmacy; he helped me to work as a pharmacy technician at the beginning of my life. It was not his own business, but once I finished my pharmacy college, I touched who he is proud of me. The same speech is right for my uncle's restaurant. Of course, he is more that proud of his kids.
Based on the reasons I discussed above, I strongly agree with that, children should work the same job of their parents in the future. They need their help, it is easy to learn and they are responsible to protect their parents business.
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Essay evaluation report
Sentence: The think that not all kids enthused with their family's business.
Description: An article is not usually followed by a verb, base: uninflected present, imperative or infinitive
Suggestion: Refer to The and think
Sentence: In fact, the might be talented and would love to build their future on their own.
Description: The token the is not usually followed by a modal auxillary
Suggestion: Refer to the and might
Sentence: In fact, no one like your father or your mother in override your weakness.
Description: The token in is not usually followed by a verb, base: uninflected present, imperative or infinitive
Suggestion: Refer to in and override
if the family have a child
if the family has a child
Sentence: Both of them used their talent primary their family business.
Description: A noun, singular, common is not usually followed by a determiner, possessive
Suggestion: Refer to primary and their
the painter man change the decoration
the painter man changes the decoration
Whether have a business or have a regular job;
Whether they have a business or have a regular job;
he is more that proud of his kids
he is more than proud of his kids
Sentence: They need their help, it is easy to learn and they are responsible to protect their parents business.
Description: A noun, plural, common is not usually followed by a noun, singular, common
Suggestion: Refer to parents and business
flaws:
No. of Grammatical Errors: 9 2 //Double check grammar & spelling issues after essay writing.
No. of Words: 637 350 //Write the essay in 30 minutes. Less content/examples wanted, but still address the main ideas.
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Attribute Value Ideal
Final score: 21 in 30
Category: Good Excellent
No. of Grammatical Errors: 9 2
No. of Spelling Errors: 0 2
No. of Sentences: 38 15
No. of Words: 637 350
No. of Characters: 2895 1500
No. of Different Words: 297 200
Fourth Root of Number of Words: 5.024 4.7
Average Word Length: 4.545 4.6
Word Length SD: 2.413 2.4
No. of Words greater than 5 chars: 176 100
No. of Words greater than 6 chars: 137 80
No. of Words greater than 7 chars: 91 40
No. of Words greater than 8 chars: 48 20
Use of Passive Voice (%): 0 0
Avg. Sentence Length: 16.763 21.0
Sentence Length SD: 7.249 7.5
Use of Discourse Markers (%): 0.474 0.12
Sentence-Text Coherence: 0.229 0.35
Sentence-Para Coherence: 0.229 0.50
Sentence-Sentence Coherence: 0.085 0.07
Number of Paragraphs: 1 5
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 195, Rule ID: A_INFINITVE[1]
Message: Probably a wrong construction: a/the + infinitive
...for them. In contrary, others disagree. The think that not all kids enthused with their f...
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Line 2, column 743, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[2]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'restaurants'' or 'restaurant's'?
Suggestion: restaurants'; restaurant's
...ity. After fifty years of building that restaurants reputation, his kids are running that b...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Line 3, column 829, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “While” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...te a fantastic touch for the customers. While, the painter man change the decoration ...
^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, if, second, secondly, so, still, then, thus, while, for example, for instance, i think, in fact, of course, first of all, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 28.0 15.1003584229 185% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 13.8261648746 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 111.0 43.0788530466 258% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 67.0 52.1666666667 128% => OK
Nominalization: 12.0 8.0752688172 149% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2977.0 1977.66487455 151% => OK
No of words: 636.0 407.700716846 156% => Less content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.68081761006 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 5.02185627292 4.48103885553 112% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.51129474602 2.67179642975 94% => OK
Unique words: 307.0 212.727598566 144% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.482704402516 0.524837075471 92% => OK
syllable_count: 917.1 618.680645161 148% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 31.0 9.59856630824 323% => Less pronouns wanted as sentence beginning.
Interrogative: 1.0 0.994623655914 101% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 38.0 20.6003584229 184% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.7601456429 48.9658058833 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 78.3421052632 100.406767564 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.7368421053 20.6045352989 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.47368421053 5.45110844103 82% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 26.0 11.8709677419 219% => Less positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.318515767504 0.236089414692 135% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0787582341224 0.076458572812 103% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0690579820933 0.0737576698707 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.205669794528 0.150856017488 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.078213340552 0.0645574589148 121% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.0 11.7677419355 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 72.16 58.1214874552 124% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 7.2 10.1575268817 71% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.57 10.9000537634 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.53 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 125.0 86.8835125448 144% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
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Write the essay in 30 minutes. We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Rates: 68.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.5 Out of 30
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