Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
It is better for people to choose jobs that come with high salaries even though they do not enjoy doing it than to choose jobs that they enjoy but come with low salaries.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Nowadays, people are more comfortable with the lives they are leading in this modern era. Some people argue to do the things which make them more satisfying and provides happiness. As far as I'm concerned, I prefer to choose jobs with high salaries than low, which I will be exploring hereunder.
First of all, with a handful of money, we can get everything we dreamt about. Moreover, there will be no place to get compromised on the things we need. We can even spend our holidays by going to a beautiful location and get relaxed. All these are possible when we have money. For instance, I work for an IT company, which gives me 1lakh dollars every month, so that I can spend on my necessities. When I got my first month's salary, I went to Italy and spent the rest of my vacation, as I always asked my parents to take me. Due to my parent's low financial condition they could not afford it. With earning money a person can be more independent and can rely on his own hard work. More money also gives a person with an immense burden of work. This explains to us how money can give pleasure to a person when he gets a salary with high pay.
Secondly, by choosing a job with more salary, a person would be able to provide a better life for his family and kids. These days the education of children has become an immense challenge for the parents as they have to pay large amounts of money for the fees. Furthermore, at many places parents, wife and kids live together on a single income individual, at this point, the lower salary jobs will not be sufficient for a person to provide enough life commodities for his family. The following example is from my own personal experience. My friend worked as a tutor, where she used to get little pay for what she was doing and it became very difficult for her to pay her children's education. Later on, she applied for different posts and got a job with a high salary. Then she was able to enhance her children's education. This provides us the fact that money is the cornerstone for many families to live.
Finally, even choosing low-income jobs have their own advantages like, the people will feel more satisfying, they feel themselves to be happy and they work with more pleasure. But in my opinion, none of the reasons would outweigh the advantages of high salary jobs.
All in all, by considering all the points into account, I vehemently assure that choosing jobs with high salaries will be a better option for the people. As they not only give us want we want by fulfilling all our dreams but also will be a great support for the families to continue their life's as they wanted.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, finally, first, furthermore, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, then, for instance, first of all, in my opinion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 9.8082437276 163% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 63.0 43.0788530466 146% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2154.0 1977.66487455 109% => OK
No of words: 480.0 407.700716846 118% => OK
Chars per words: 4.4875 4.8611393121 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.68069463864 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.4456558709 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 239.0 212.727598566 112% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.497916666667 0.524837075471 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 684.0 618.680645161 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.1933833675 48.9658058833 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 86.16 100.406767564 86% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.2 20.6045352989 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.92 5.45110844103 90% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.283200576505 0.236089414692 120% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0814046597167 0.076458572812 106% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0663117758341 0.0737576698707 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.190677401914 0.150856017488 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0622315999854 0.0645574589148 96% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.3 11.7677419355 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 69.11 58.1214874552 119% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.3 10.1575268817 82% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.76 10.9000537634 80% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.51 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 86.8835125448 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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