Do you agree or disagree with the following statement It is important to know about events happening around the world even if it is unlikely that they will affect your daily life Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer | TOEFL IELTS GMAT GRE SAT ACT PTE ESL

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
It is important to know about events happening around the world, even if it is unlikely that they will affect your daily life.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

Recently, there has been a ton of debate on whether people should keep update on latest global news. Personally, I am of the opinion that it is crucial to care about unrelated events happening currently around the world. I feel this way because of two reasons, which I will explore in this essay.

In the first place, discussing events happening around the world is an effective way to increase our social connections. Obviously, with the development of modern technology, each person is forced to receive a variety of information every day, and it is not surprising to see people talk about them at different occasions. Therefore,to blend in, we have to have a general idea about the topics. This is best demonstrated by my own experience. I once attended a group trip after graduating from college, and shared a room with another student to save money. At the beginning, we had an awkward and silent moment, as we knew nothing about each other and barely talked . The situation changed when I brought up a topic about a piece of global news, and we became close friends and kept in touch since then.

Secondly, knowing events around the world also benefits us by save resource. Evidently, it is crucial to keep update on the most recent advances in the scientific field, which allows scientists avoid wasting time and money on repeating works of others, but save them for further work. For example, last summer a professor in my department submitted a proposal of clinical trial, which was expected to cost millions. During the ethical assessment, another experienced professor realized that a similar trial had been conducted by a well-known expert, congruently they denied the application.

In conclusion, I am fully convinced that people should know the latest events happening around the world. This is because it help people blend in their social circle and because it encourages people to improve themselves.

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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 333, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , to
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Message: Don't put a space before the full stop
Suggestion: .
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Line 7, column 126, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'helps'?
Suggestion: helps
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, well, for example, i feel, in conclusion, in the first place

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 31.0 43.0788530466 72% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1605.0 1977.66487455 81% => OK
No of words: 320.0 407.700716846 78% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.015625 4.8611393121 103% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.22948505376 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.74205246471 2.67179642975 103% => OK
Unique words: 195.0 212.727598566 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.609375 0.524837075471 116% => OK
syllable_count: 495.9 618.680645161 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 43.1796754851 48.9658058833 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.3125 100.406767564 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0 20.6045352989 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.5625 5.45110844103 139% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.133586436832 0.236089414692 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0455876019087 0.076458572812 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0548776869157 0.0737576698707 74% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0806712789406 0.150856017488 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0165607919411 0.0645574589148 26% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.2 11.7677419355 104% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.84 10.9000537634 109% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.82 8.01818996416 110% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 86.8835125448 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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