Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
It is important to know about eventshappening around the world, even if it unlikely that they will affect your daily life.
Use reasons and examples to support your answer.
This rapid developing world is full of various events every day such as the meetings of different countries’ leaders, the launch of the latest satellite or the release of new policies. Some of these events are closely related to people's lives, while others are far from lives. Some people hold the point that it is important to know about events happening around the world even if it is unlikely affect their daily life. While others think of the opposite. From my perspective, I agree with the former view. Here are my reasons.
First of all, if people can know some of the important things happening in the world, it is very useful for their future development and decision making. The world economy has not been stable in recent years. The economic policies of some countries or the reform of large enterprises may have an impact on the world economy and even lead to financial crisis. If citizens are properly getting the information about these events about economic change, they could prepare in advance; for example, they could make adjustments to their investments. And financial professionals can reconsider their careers for the future. Although these economic policies would not affect individuals’ lives at present, it might not be the case in the future. Hence I think it is very essential for us to know some of the events that are happening in the world.
What is more, being aware of happenings in different parts of the world can make a person being very attractive to others, even if those events have no relation with their current lives. When people do socializing, they find that some persons are confident and are especially good at communicating with others, because they know several interesting things happening around the world, which extremely impress others. As a result they would be able to make many friends and their life would be more colorful than others. Conversely those people who know very little about what is going on in the world, when they talk with their friends, they would have too little knowledge about interesting news and had nothing to share with others. Finally, they gradually become a listener and might even lose some friends. Therefore, even if it does not have a big impact on people's lives, people should have a proper understanding of some domestic and foreign events, which can make them an interesting person and become popular.
In conclusion, keeping abreast of what is going on in the world is not only good for individuals’ careers and personal development, but it is also enriching lives and making them more open minded. Therefore, even if it does not affect people's lives, it is important as well.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 230, Rule ID: TO_NON_BASE[1]
Message: The verb after "to" should be in the base form: 'people'.
Suggestion: people
... of these events are closely related to peoples lives, while others are far from lives....
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Line 1, column 422, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “While” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...it is unlikely affect their daily life. While others think of the opposite. From my p...
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Line 2, column 34, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...sons. First of all, if people can know some of the important things happening in the world...
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Line 2, column 738, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Hence,
...it might not be the case in the future. Hence I think it is very essential for us to ...
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Line 2, column 788, Rule ID: SOME_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'some'.
Suggestion: some
...ink it is very essential for us to know some of the events that are happening in the world....
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Line 3, column 520, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Conversely,
...ife would be more colorful than others. Conversely those people who know very little about...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, conversely, finally, first, hence, if, may, so, therefore, well, while, for example, i think, in conclusion, such as, as a result, first of all, what is more
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 15.1003584229 159% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 40.0 43.0788530466 93% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2223.0 1977.66487455 112% => OK
No of words: 451.0 407.700716846 111% => OK
Chars per words: 4.92904656319 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.60833598836 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5829039786 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 211.0 212.727598566 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.467849223947 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 697.5 618.680645161 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 12.0 3.51792114695 341% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 62.8077006126 48.9658058833 128% => OK
Chars per sentence: 105.857142857 100.406767564 105% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.4761904762 20.6045352989 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.0 5.45110844103 147% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.196653037433 0.236089414692 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0635342743844 0.076458572812 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0667295491958 0.0737576698707 90% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.122444613911 0.150856017488 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0308716824742 0.0645574589148 48% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 11.7677419355 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.31 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.76 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 86.8835125448 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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