The statement is making us to talk about that whether we should be aware of the events taken place throughout the world, even though they would not make any change to our lives to some extent. While, I am just a college student who definately cannot represent everyone in the world. I can only base my judgement on my own personality and obeservation. Having said that, I suppoes that we ought to be for the statement, and several reasons can support my point of view.
Off the top of my head, the reason is that knowing more about the world makes us a man with critical thinking, instead of look upon somethings just in one way. I will illustrate this point by taking myself as an example. Three years ago when I was a fresh man in our university, I had no idea about which major I should choose. One of my close friends recommanded literature and arts to me, which was strongly opposed by me for the reason that these subjests were useless. As time goes by, I began to realize the importance of literature and arts. Beacues with much more knowledge about news and history, I learn that how significant role literature and arts take especially in the periods of huge disasters and wars. If I had learned much about what was happening in the world, I wouldn't have made judgements without any thinking.
Further more, events happened in other areas is just like a mirror that make us reflect on ourselves. Being aware of how difficult life some chilrdren in poor areas are living, I learn to treasure my life in which there is no need to worry about food and house. Concious of what a developed life people in powerful countries live, I made up my mind to study harder so that I am able to dvelop my own country. Without knowing the events seemingly less relative with me, I would not be a better me.
In a nutshell, just as a famous words goes, there are never two things that have no relationship with each other. We ought to pay attention to the events happening all over the world, because every of them indeed will affect our life. And chances are good that they will make our life better.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 194, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “While” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
...any change to our lives to some extent. While, I am just a college student who defina...
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Line 3, column 782, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: wouldn't
...bout what was happening in the world, I wouldnt have made judgements without any thinki...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
if, look, so, while
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 13.0 9.8082437276 133% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 54.0 43.0788530466 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1719.0 1977.66487455 87% => OK
No of words: 384.0 407.700716846 94% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.4765625 4.8611393121 92% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.4267276788 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.43287572172 2.67179642975 91% => OK
Unique words: 217.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.565104166667 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 549.9 618.680645161 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 38.4191069362 48.9658058833 78% => OK
Chars per sentence: 95.5 100.406767564 95% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.3333333333 20.6045352989 104% => OK
Discourse Markers: 1.05555555556 5.45110844103 19% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.212804467219 0.236089414692 90% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.063972209749 0.076458572812 84% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0495350869401 0.0737576698707 67% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.13355189533 0.150856017488 89% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0345633589098 0.0645574589148 54% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.3 11.7677419355 88% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 58.1214874552 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.7 10.9000537634 80% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.52 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 69.0 86.8835125448 79% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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