Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? It is more enjoyable to have a job where you work only three days a week for long hours than to have a job where you work five days a week for shorter hours. Use specific reasons and examples to suppo

Nowadays, in order to survive the current economic climate, everyone is supposed to work from down to dusk, and everyone has to have his/her own time schedule. Many people adhere to the view to work two or three days in a week for long hours, and be off of their job the rest of the week, while others prefer to work five or six days of a week but shortly. Ego, when it comes to my stance, by weighing the pros and cons, I firmly hold that working everyday is more avid for people than working 3 or 4 days a week. In what follows, I cogently pinpoint my most conspicuous reasons to justify my point of view.
The first exquisite point to be mentioned is that having the best time table, demands to have firmly time. As a rule, somethings in our live need to be followed daily like, reading a book, having an exercise, going to courses etc. On the other hand working for a long time for some days a week, and having lots of leisure time for rest of the week, seems extremely boring. For example; I go to course, university, office, body building club and read some enthusiastic book every day, and by the ending of the week, I have time to go out with my friends. I really enjoy of my life by this scenario.
Another equally significant point to be mentioned is that we could have another part time job at the same time. In the modern era, due to complexities of life, people need to work hard, and earn more money. Therefore, having two part time job seems very enjoyable for them, this situation make the situation easy for them, and help them to be happy. For instance; my brother graduated from university and need to have money to establish his own business. As soon he found a part time job by reasonable salary, but it was not enough for him. Consequently, he found another part time job, when I asked him, he told me " I have ever never enjoyed my life such these days".
In brief contemplating all the aforementioned reasons, I prefer to work all days of the week, because it seems more enjoyable for me, and it avoid having boring time during our hustle and bustle circumstances.

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Average: 7.6 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 449, Rule ID: EVERYDAY_EVERY_DAY[3]
Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
Suggestion: every day
...os and cons, I firmly hold that working everyday is more avid for people than working 3 ...
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Line 3, column 81, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
Suggestion: part-time
...mentioned is that we could have another part time job at the same time. In the modern era...
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Line 3, column 229, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
Suggestion: part-time
... earn more money. Therefore, having two part time job seems very enjoyable for them, this...
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Line 3, column 239, Rule ID: CD_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun 'job' seems to be countable, so consider using: 'jobs'.
Suggestion: jobs
... money. Therefore, having two part time job seems very enjoyable for them, this sit...
^^^
Line 3, column 474, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
Suggestion: part-time
...sh his own business. As soon he found a part time job by reasonable salary, but it was no...
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Line 3, column 572, Rule ID: EN_COMPOUNDS
Message: This word is normally spelled with hyphen.
Suggestion: part-time
...for him. Consequently, he found another part time job, when I asked him, he told me &apos...
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Line 4, column 142, Rule ID: IT_VBZ[1]
Message: Did you mean 'avoids'?
Suggestion: avoids
... it seems more enjoyable for me, and it avoid having boring time during our hustle an...
^^^^^

Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, first, if, really, so, therefore, thus, while, as to, for example, for instance, in brief, on the other hand

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 5.0 11.0286738351 45% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 42.0 43.0788530466 97% => OK
Preposition: 52.0 52.1666666667 100% => OK
Nominalization: 3.0 8.0752688172 37% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1715.0 1977.66487455 87% => OK
No of words: 389.0 407.700716846 95% => OK
Chars per words: 4.4087403599 4.8611393121 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44106776838 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.445490895 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 206.0 212.727598566 97% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.529562982005 0.524837075471 101% => OK
syllable_count: 546.3 618.680645161 88% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 8.0 1.86738351254 428% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.4735211632 48.9658058833 87% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.1875 100.406767564 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.3125 20.6045352989 118% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.9375 5.45110844103 146% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.332817316294 0.236089414692 141% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.116660923965 0.076458572812 153% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0842915622429 0.0737576698707 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.222191540859 0.150856017488 147% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0506204441828 0.0645574589148 78% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 11.7677419355 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 64.04 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.59 10.9000537634 79% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.79 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 86.8835125448 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 17.5 10.002688172 175% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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