All workers want some vacation after working hard but they do not have enough time for this. In this situation, everyone agonizes about this problem. I agree about a job with more vacation time but low salary is better than a job with a high salary but less vacation. I have two reasons which I explore in this essay.
To begin with, even though people get a low salary if they have more vacation, they can rest more. If people have more vacation then they can reduce stress. In addition, the stress is very bad for human because they get angry easily and have a headache. Then, they cannot focus on work. One good example is my sister. Although she is not working yet, my sister is 19 years old so she will take the national college entrance exam soon. Hence, she always studies for almost twenty-four hours without sleep. Therefore she has a lot of stress. When I ask something she gets angry at me. Moreover, she cannot focus on her work because she needs some rest.
Secondly, if you have more vacation you can play with your kids. Earning money is also important to live but if you have kids, you must take care of your kids and you spend more time with them. One good example is my uncle. My younger uncle married four years ago. He has two kids. He always says if you have kids, you have to play with your kids a lot of the time, because it is good to be with both parents in childhood.
In conclusion, I agree that a job with more vacation time but low salary is better. More vacation has more positive effect than high salary. According to my two reasons: first, I can rest more thus I can reduce my stress. Controlling stress is really important in your life. Second reason is that you can have time with your kids.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, if, moreover, really, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, thus, in addition, in conclusion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.0286738351 36% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 51.0 43.0788530466 118% => OK
Preposition: 30.0 52.1666666667 58% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1414.0 1977.66487455 71% => OK
No of words: 323.0 407.700716846 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.37770897833 4.8611393121 90% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23936324884 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.09517250292 2.67179642975 78% => OK
Unique words: 162.0 212.727598566 76% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.501547987616 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 444.6 618.680645161 72% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 14.0 9.59856630824 146% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 25.0 20.6003584229 121% => OK
Sentence length: 12.0 20.1344086022 60% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 32.7187774833 48.9658058833 67% => OK
Chars per sentence: 56.56 100.406767564 56% => More chars_per_sentence wanted.
Words per sentence: 12.92 20.6045352989 63% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.32 5.45110844103 98% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 9.0 3.85842293907 233% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.379071942964 0.236089414692 161% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.113002820413 0.076458572812 148% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.195995498264 0.0737576698707 266% => The coherence between sentences is low.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.277391430656 0.150856017488 184% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.138968127494 0.0645574589148 215% => More connections among paragraphs wanted.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 5.7 11.7677419355 48% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 76.22 58.1214874552 131% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 5.6 10.1575268817 55% => Flesch kincaid grade is low.
coleman_liau_index: 7.24 10.9000537634 66% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 6.38 8.01818996416 80% => OK
difficult_words: 44.0 86.8835125448 51% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.002688172 60% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 6.8 10.0537634409 68% => OK
text_standard: 6.0 10.247311828 59% => The average readability is low. Need to imporve the language.
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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