Innate features play a prominent role in our lives. Eye's color, skin's color and some other features are because of the genes that transmitted from our ancestors. However, all of the skills and features that a person has, is not due to his/her inheritance. A controversial question which is often raised regarding this subject is whether leadership also comes naturally. From my perspective, leadership is an achievable characteristic that we can attend for two overriding reasons. In what follows, I am going to elaborate on my viewpoints.
The first focal point that prompts me to hold this idea is that I believe a human can learn everything. Having experience in all conditions can help a person to learn a skill. In addition, not only does circumstance affect the skills which we learn, but also, education is another notable factor. In this respect, I would like to mention my personal experience. I was a manager in a group when I was in high school. I had not any experience as a manager. Accordingly, I could not afford my responsibilities. After a while, I had an offer from a company to be a manager there. It is in everybody's nature to try to solve and improve his/her drawbacks. I read many books and consulted with many prosperous managers. Surprisingly, my managing skills improved and did my job in the company in the best way that is possible. Had I not learned the skills, I would not have been a great leader in the company. This experience taught me training can pave the way for learning every skill.
The second reason why I advocate this point of view lies in the fact that If we assume that leadership comes naturally, the offspring of leaders should be such a good leader like their fathers. Whereas, great leaders' children are not necessarily prosperous managers. It should be stressed that all elections that hold in countries, contrasts the idea that leadership comes naturally. Democracy emerged due to the fact that people did not believe that the monarchy system is a desirable one. It is clear that the sovereign's children were not as good as their parents and thus people proposed elections to show their discontent about the idea.
In sum, from what has been discussed above we may safely reach the conclusion that leadership, as well as other skills, can be learned. Firstly, my personal experiences demonstrate that leadership is like other skills that can be learned. Secondly, historical events show that people did not believe in the mentioned theory. In the end, I recommend politicians to define a new rule in order to teach more leadership skills in universities.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 172, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
...ransmitted from our ancestors. However, all of the skills and features that a person has, ...
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Line 5, column 195, Rule ID: SENTENCE_FRAGMENT[1]
Message: “Whereas” at the beginning of a sentence requires a 2nd clause. Maybe a comma, question or exclamation mark is missing, or the sentence is incomplete and should be joined with the following sentence.
... such a good leader like their fathers. Whereas, great leaders children are not necessa...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, but, first, firstly, however, if, may, regarding, second, secondly, so, thus, well, whereas, while, in addition, as well as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 23.0 15.1003584229 152% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 21.0 11.0286738351 190% => OK
Pronoun: 61.0 43.0788530466 142% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 47.0 52.1666666667 90% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2170.0 1977.66487455 110% => OK
No of words: 444.0 407.700716846 109% => OK
Chars per words: 4.88738738739 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.5903493882 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.90748581149 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 227.0 212.727598566 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.511261261261 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 673.2 618.680645161 109% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 28.0 20.6003584229 136% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 33.6249573249 48.9658058833 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 77.5 100.406767564 77% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.8571428571 20.6045352989 77% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.07142857143 5.45110844103 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.88709677419 225% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.141427244538 0.236089414692 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0340762636799 0.076458572812 45% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0436389517817 0.0737576698707 59% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0867075539279 0.150856017488 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0432117609008 0.0645574589148 67% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.5 11.7677419355 81% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 58.1214874552 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 10.1575268817 79% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.79 10.9000537634 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.01 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 102.0 86.8835125448 117% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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