Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? The rules that societies today expect young people to follow and obey are too strict. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Young people are an essential part of a society. It is in everybody's nature to seek liberty and freedom. Young people aslo need liberty more that other people because of their more selfishness. A controversial question which is often raised regarding this subject is whether nowadays the rules that societies expect young people to follow are too strict. From my perspective, in the modern era, young people have more liberty rather than past for two overriding reasons. In what follows, I am going to elaborate on my viewpoints.
The first focal point that prompts me to hold this idea is that in the contemprory world, the rules wich are in societies are very easier than past. It is axiomatic that the development of technology is one of the striking reasons. For instance, the relationship and friendship between young people was very restrictly in the past. In this respect, I would like to mention my personal experience. My father and my mother never have seen each other before their marriage. Conversly, I and my wife had a relationship before our marriage. As you can see, the culture of our society has changed.
The second reason why I advocate this point of view lies in the fact that the imprtance of religions has declined in communities. In the past centuries, religion has played a prominent role in people's lives. People, specially muslims, could not drink bevearge easily. Dancing in some countries was a crime. As a case in point, I can allude to my uncle when he was young. He lived in a village that had a strict culture. Playing some kinds of music was a crime in that village, but my uncle was interested in music. He always played his musical instrument out of the viilage. On the other hand, you always see young people who are playing a guitar and are singing in the street. As you can see, there is remarkable correlation between the decline of religion and young people's freedom.
In sum, from what has been discussed above, we may safely reach the conclusion that the rules that young people have to do them are not too strict. Not only does the development of thechnology and cultural changes increased young people's liberty, but also, the decline of religion gives young people more opportunity. In the end, I recommend politicians to define new rules in order to increase young people's freedom
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Suggestion: rules'; rule's
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...elationship and friendship between young people was very restrictly in the past. ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, regarding, second, so, for instance, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 13.0 11.0286738351 118% => OK
Pronoun: 44.0 43.0788530466 102% => OK
Preposition: 56.0 52.1666666667 107% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1928.0 1977.66487455 97% => OK
No of words: 402.0 407.700716846 99% => OK
Chars per words: 4.7960199005 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.47771567384 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64421659269 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 208.0 212.727598566 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.517412935323 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 603.0 618.680645161 97% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 7.0 3.08781362007 227% => Less articles wanted as sentence beginning.
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 15.0 20.1344086022 74% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 36.5062408542 48.9658058833 75% => OK
Chars per sentence: 74.1538461538 100.406767564 74% => OK
Words per sentence: 15.4615384615 20.6045352989 75% => OK
Discourse Markers: 3.11538461538 5.45110844103 57% => More transition words/phrases wanted.
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.204480084769 0.236089414692 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0529078209184 0.076458572812 69% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0613504566676 0.0737576698707 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.13040047688 0.150856017488 86% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0564061411979 0.0645574589148 87% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 8.9 11.7677419355 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 64.71 58.1214874552 111% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.0 10.1575268817 79% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.26 10.9000537634 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.84 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 88.0 86.8835125448 101% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 6.5 10.002688172 65% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.0 10.0537634409 80% => OK
text_standard: 8.0 10.247311828 78% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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