No one can deny that there are both positive and negative aspects of advertisements for corporations to enhance their sales. If I were forced to choose, I would definitely select that firms using advertisements to make their commodites more attractive to the customers. It is my firm belief companies tending to add effects to their products for a number of reasons and I will develop these ideas in the subsequent paragraphs.
To begin with, companies need to increase their sales by spread their advertisements in many places like social media, television and radio. I have to admit that my opinion on this matter has been profoundly influenced by my own personal experience. One year ago, I watched an advertisment of a huge company which makes burger, in the picture there was a massive sandwitch with many slides of burger, cheese, tomato and lettuse. Unfortunately, after visiting the restaurant, I ordered the same product, but it was differ from the advertisment where its half of the size and with less meat. Consequently, I asked to meet the supervisor, so he said to me the products on television are various from the real product and this is just for attracting people to buy it. If I had knew about this type of advertising, I would not have bought from this restaurant again.
Secondly, because of the high competition in the market corporations tend to fake their advertisments to win in this competitive area by providing only pros for their products. Drawing from my own experience. In my country there were two huge companies which sell chicken for cooking,so if you are driving your car you will either see huge pictures for their chickend on the billboards or listen to songs for their products. However, I tried these two companie's products, but none of their advertisements are true. In contrast, they have a bad quality products and they tend to this type just to compete the other company.
In conclusion, I strongly feel that companies tend to fake their advertisments in order to attract more people. This is because they need to boost their profit and the high competition between firms.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 515, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'differed'.
Suggestion: differed
... I ordered the same product, but it was differ from the advertisment where its half of...
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Line 3, column 550, Rule ID: IT_IS[6]
Message: Did you mean 'it's' (='it is') instead of 'its' (possessive pronoun)?
Suggestion: it's; it is
... was differ from the advertisment where its half of the size and with less meat. Co...
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Line 3, column 774, Rule ID: HAVE_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Use past participle here: 'known'.
Suggestion: known
...r attracting people to buy it. If I had knew about this type of advertising, I would...
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Line 5, column 284, Rule ID: COMMA_PARENTHESIS_WHITESPACE
Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , so
...companies which sell chicken for cooking,so if you are driving your car you will ei...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, however, if, second, secondly, so, in conclusion, in contrast, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 53.0 43.0788530466 123% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1766.0 1977.66487455 89% => OK
No of words: 358.0 407.700716846 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.93296089385 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34981470047 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.91996589111 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 198.0 212.727598566 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.553072625698 0.524837075471 105% => OK
syllable_count: 550.8 618.680645161 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 44.1446485998 48.9658058833 90% => OK
Chars per sentence: 110.375 100.406767564 110% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.375 20.6045352989 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.9375 5.45110844103 109% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.115879249185 0.236089414692 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0413926541587 0.076458572812 54% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0277958184093 0.0737576698707 38% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0743417130014 0.150856017488 49% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0188036040682 0.0645574589148 29% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.61 10.9000537634 107% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.48 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 86.8835125448 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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