Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Opinions divide when it comes to the issue of the negative effects of movies and television, with some people thinking that the electronic screens can be harmful to children, while others claiming that their advantages weight more. From my perspective, I agree with the former and contend that movies and television would have pessimistic effects on kids\' study and health.
First of all, watching movies and television can greatly decrease students\' grades. For one thing, we may pay attention to the long-time drama on T.V.. Nowadays, to attract more audience, most stations would split one funny show into several parts and tend to buy longer dramas. That is to say, when watching television, its set would make children sitting in front of it all day. As a result, students would have few time studying, leading to their lower scores. For another thing, though some parents may control children\'s time for watching television, we cannot deny its appealing feature. Given that the drama is constant everyday, children will no doubt thinking about the following plots after seeing one chapter, because of which then children would be absent-minded when studying. Thus, these electronic screens can be too attractive to make students focus on their study.
Secondly, movies and television can also destroy kids\' health to some extent. To illustrate, let\'s return to its time-consuming feature as we mentioned above. Different from the past children\'s enough time for running after class, in the present, most kids lack enough exercise due to their tied schedule. Under this circumstance, if children still use their poor free time for watching movies, there should be no spare time for them to do sports. Therefore, it is vital for young people to watch less television and do more sports. Furthermore, as for children\'s mental health, the movies and television can also make bad effects. Since there are many violent movies or dirty jokes in the Internet, students are easy to find access to those shows. Considering they are in such an age that easily be affected by others, then their personalities and characteristics would be led to the wrong way. Therefore, movies and television can affect children\'s mental health.
Admittedly, there are some advantages for watching television. For instance, children can learn what is going on around the world by watching news and broaden their horizons through various documents, which also benefits their study. However, young people can also enjoy this advantage by reading newspapers while no need to bear the aforementioned risks. Accordingly, children should watch these devices less.
All in all, despite its potential benefits, I still hold the view that movies and television can bring young people more disadvantages over advantages, because they would not only affect students\' study, but also harm children\'s health physically and mentally.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, but, first, furthermore, however, if, may, second, secondly, so, still, then, therefore, thus, while, another thing, as for, for instance, no doubt, as a result, first of all, for another thing, for one thing, that is to say
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 23.0 9.8082437276 234% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 43.0788530466 84% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2448.0 1977.66487455 124% => OK
No of words: 462.0 407.700716846 113% => OK
Chars per words: 5.2987012987 4.8611393121 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.63618218583 4.48103885553 103% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.68545204857 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 253.0 212.727598566 119% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.547619047619 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 719.1 618.680645161 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 9.0 3.51792114695 256% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.9381142162 48.9658058833 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.0 100.406767564 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.25 20.6045352989 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.125 5.45110844103 186% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 3.85842293907 285% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.134681326972 0.236089414692 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0444180305674 0.076458572812 58% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.055331285812 0.0737576698707 75% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.097038406648 0.150856017488 64% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0758302430304 0.0645574589148 117% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 11.7677419355 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 52.19 58.1214874552 90% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.46 10.9000537634 123% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.1 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 86.8835125448 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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