Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Movies and television, the contents of people's recreation, have been valued and even trigger a heated discussion over whether movies and television have more negative effects on the way youngsters behave, compared to positive effects. Movies and television, in many peoples' views, cannot benefit young people. Contrary to these people's opinions is my perspective that movies and television are beneficial to young people, due to the contributions to academic performance and sterling qualities.
What must be prioritized is that when watching movies and television, instead of doing other things, youngsters can promote their academic learning, by improving their acknowledge and triggering their interests. To begin with, the more students appreciate movies and television, the more they reap a large amount of expertise. In detail, I can learn a large quantity of science knowledge by watching documentary videos, and I can also study more about culture and history by seeing other countries' movies; on the other hand, under no circumstances can I learn such a wide range of knowledge from other things. Moreover, never can we ignore the significance of looking television and movies to cultivating youngsters' interests. To explain it further, there are a wide range of fields what we can learn from movies and television, like history, arts, and computer science, so we would find it more interesting to study these classes; on the contrary, there is little chance for students to interest about classes by doing other things.
What is equally worth discussing is that seeing moives and television, rather than looking other things, is favorable to young people's personal qualities, by boosting their independence and persistence. First, it is well-known that children can learn indepedence by watching movies and television. To be more specific, when I was young, my parents recommended me to watch some interesting tv-shows, which were about how to solve problems independently when encountered issues, and so I learned how to resolve math questions by myself; however, it is impossible for children to learn quickly to be independent. Furthermore, only by appreciating relevent movies and videos, can youngsters improve their persistence. Specifically, I remembered once time, I was watching one project of the olympic games, which was running competition, and I was impressed about athletes' persistence; in contrast, will doing other things can inspire youngsters' persistence?
Academic preformance, the foundation of youngsters' success, can be boosted if they watching more movies and television. Sterling qualities, the bedrock of young people's future, can be fecilitated when they appreciate more videos. In conclusion, only by seeing more movies and videos, instead of doing other things, can young people reap numerous benefits.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 5, column 899, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'will' requires the base form of the verb: 'do'
Suggestion: do
...athletes persistence; in contrast, will doing other things can inspire youngsters per...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, furthermore, however, if, look, moreover, so, well, in conclusion, in contrast, on the contrary, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 21.0 15.1003584229 139% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 16.0 9.8082437276 163% => OK
Conjunction : 22.0 13.8261648746 159% => OK
Relative clauses : 10.0 11.0286738351 91% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 43.0788530466 77% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 14.0 8.0752688172 173% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2415.0 1977.66487455 122% => OK
No of words: 435.0 407.700716846 107% => OK
Chars per words: 5.55172413793 4.8611393121 114% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.56690854021 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.02878775937 2.67179642975 113% => OK
Unique words: 213.0 212.727598566 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.489655172414 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 733.5 618.680645161 119% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.7 1.51630824373 112% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 15.0 4.94265232975 303% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 27.0 20.1344086022 134% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 77.3675279106 48.9658058833 158% => OK
Chars per sentence: 150.9375 100.406767564 150% => OK
Words per sentence: 27.1875 20.6045352989 132% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.1875 5.45110844103 169% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.171279966749 0.236089414692 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0735237617927 0.076458572812 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0609995728088 0.0737576698707 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.13319056171 0.150856017488 88% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0792393863042 0.0645574589148 123% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 18.3 11.7677419355 156% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 35.61 58.1214874552 61% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 15.0 10.1575268817 148% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 15.21 10.9000537634 140% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.11 8.01818996416 114% => OK
difficult_words: 114.0 86.8835125448 131% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 10.002688172 150% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.8 10.0537634409 127% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.247311828 146% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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