In current society, the debate concerning whether to attain an occupation in corporation owned by others or to obtain a job in a company owned by one\'s own family has never ceased and even gains vigor. Some people maintain that working in the company of one\'s own family provide better platform for individuals to put their own ideas into practice while others hold a point of view that working for business owned by someone else broadens one\'s horizon in that they are not limited to just a company and are able to seek other excellent opportunities to experience different industries. From my perspective, getting jobs owned by someone else outshines gaining occupation of one\'s own family.
To begin with, working for business owned by someone else provide us with more choices and possibilities, thus individuals can embark on a domain which he is really interested in. It is possible that the business of one\'s work family is not in a realm that someone is fond of and he has no passion for it, thus working in the company is a waste of time However, he is able to choose whatever industry he likes if he works for business owned by someone else. Then he will be more passionate about his occupation and will have a more promising future.
What\'s more, owning a job in a company of someone else equips us with many skills which cannot be gained when we work in family company. In company of someone else, we can sharpen our skills, such as interpersonal skill, multi-task skills and working capability. To be more specific, we ought to transfer to upper level through our effort and in this process we gain a deep understanding of the company, which cultivates us to great extent. On the other hand, when we work for our family company, others will not treat us like an average staff and we are unlikely to gain insight of the company, which poses a threat to our future development.
Admittedly, some people may argue that someone can easily get a job of a high salary and strategic level by working in business of one\'s own family, thus having a felicitous life. However, it\'s just shortsighted and unilateral to say such words. It\'s wise of us to consider the possibility that our own family company may go bankrupt one day and at that time we may not find an ideal job of high salary if we are not capable. While people working for business owned by someone else can only gain an occupation at operational or tactic level at the beginning, they can have a broad view through the whole company and get promoted through their own ability. Moreover, they are free to change their occupation if they want to explore other fields, which shows that they may still have a chance to hold a colorful life.
To sum up, working in company of some else is more beneficial due to more choices, more possibilities and cultivation of skills.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 59, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[4]
Message: The pronoun 'someone' must be used with a third-person verb: 'provides'.
Suggestion: provides
...king for business owned by someone else provide us with more choices and possibilities,...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
however, if, may, moreover, really, so, still, then, thus, while, such as, to begin with, to sum up, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 48.0 43.0788530466 111% => OK
Preposition: 76.0 52.1666666667 146% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2348.0 1977.66487455 119% => OK
No of words: 502.0 407.700716846 123% => OK
Chars per words: 4.67729083665 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.7334296765 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59307158668 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 223.0 212.727598566 105% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.44422310757 0.524837075471 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 774.0 618.680645161 125% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 31.0 20.1344086022 154% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 74.5754651343 48.9658058833 152% => OK
Chars per sentence: 146.75 100.406767564 146% => OK
Words per sentence: 31.375 20.6045352989 152% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.375 5.45110844103 135% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0726517236294 0.236089414692 31% => The similarity between the topic and the content is low.
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0307231889002 0.076458572812 40% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0317268103782 0.0737576698707 43% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0527797784097 0.150856017488 35% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0280128059791 0.0645574589148 43% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.3 11.7677419355 139% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 48.47 58.1214874552 83% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 14.2 10.1575268817 140% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.46 10.9000537634 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.0 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 90.0 86.8835125448 104% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 27.5 10.002688172 275% => Linsear_write_formula is high.
gunning_fog: 14.4 10.0537634409 143% => OK
text_standard: 28.0 10.247311828 273% => The average readability is very high. Good job!
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 71.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.5 Out of 30
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