Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
The rules that societies today expect young people to follow and obey are too strict.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Society rules, the foundation of society, has been valued and even triggers heated discussion over whether rules are too strict for young people to obey. Not strict rules, in many people's view, can foster youngsters' innovative quality. Contrary to these people's opinion is my perspective that strict rules are more beneficial to juveniles due to the contributions to academic learning and necessary skills.
What must be prioritized is that strict rules, instead of loose rules, can boost young people's academic learning, by helping them to obtain more knowledge and promote efficiency. Initially, with the help of strict rules, students are able to learn a large amount of knowledge. To be more specific, only by more strict class rules can students focus on the teaching, which can promote their knowledge level; in contrast, if students are not required to obey stern rules, will they underline their learning? Moreover, never can we ignore the importance of strict rules about efficiency, which can promote youngsters' study or work efficiency. To explain it further, if there are deadlines for every schoolwork in the school, students would do homework more quickly which can save a lot of time; on the other hand, if there are loose rules in the school, many students would spend time on other things such like playing computer games or chating with social media tools, rather than doing homework, which can cause low efficiency and bad grades.
What is equally worth discussing is that only by applying strict rules, rather than using loose rules, can society place youngsters as beneficiaries, by improving necessary skills such as interpersonal skills and time management skills. To begin with, the more society emphasizes strict rules, the more young people can consider others' though, which can promote their interpersonal skills. In detail, when there are many strict rules in a company, young people will be less self-regarding by considering other people or taking care of others; on the contrary, loose rules will make people more selfish. Furthermore, never can we ignore the advantage of strict rules to time management skills. Specifically, youngsters will be more expert in scheduling their time if the company rules that employees must go to work on time every day. However, there will be no benefit to young people to improve their time management skills by applying loose rules.
Academic learning, the bedrock of youngsters' success, can be boosted when they follow strict rules. Necessary skills, the foundation of young people's future development, will be fostered, if they obey stern rules. In conclusion, only by applying strict rules, instead of using loose rules, can society improve young people's vital academic accumulation and personal skills.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 255, Rule ID: POSSESIVE_APOSTROPHE[1]
Message: Possible typo: apostrophe is missing. Did you mean 'peoples'' or 'people's'?
Suggestion: peoples'; people's
...s innovative quality. Contrary to these peoples opinion is my perspective that strict r...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, furthermore, however, if, moreover, regarding, so, in conclusion, in contrast, such as, on the contrary, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 24.0 9.8082437276 245% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 18.0 43.0788530466 42% => OK
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2341.0 1977.66487455 118% => OK
No of words: 442.0 407.700716846 108% => OK
Chars per words: 5.2963800905 4.8611393121 109% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.58517132086 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64445186241 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 198.0 212.727598566 93% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.447963800905 0.524837075471 85% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 711.9 618.680645161 115% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 0.0 9.59856630824 0% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 14.0 4.94265232975 283% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 75.1797845169 48.9658058833 154% => OK
Chars per sentence: 137.705882353 100.406767564 137% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.0 20.6045352989 126% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.35294117647 5.45110844103 153% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.179435339767 0.236089414692 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0794738176667 0.076458572812 104% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0390846328392 0.0737576698707 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.139488648457 0.150856017488 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0326731310475 0.0645574589148 51% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 16.5 11.7677419355 140% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 58.1214874552 78% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 10.1575268817 132% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.76 10.9000537634 126% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.46 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 99.0 86.8835125448 114% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 14.0 10.247311828 137% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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