Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Successful people try new things and take risks rather than only doing what they already know how to do well.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Personal preference, the foundation of personal success, has been valued and even triggers heated discussion over whether successful people prefer to try new things and take risks rather than doing things that they already know. Ordinary things, in many people's views, can boost personal development. Contrary to these people's opinions is my perspective that doing new things and taking risks are beneficial to people's success, due to their contributions to sterling qualities and professional development.
What must be prioritized is that trying new methods and taking risks, rather than doing regular things, are favorable to people's sterling qualities, by promoting their independence and innovations. To begin with, only by using new things and couraging to face risks, can people learn more about independence. In detail, when we are going to do something new or dangerous, we have to face some dilemmas which can not solve by depending on others, such as researching new fields; in contrast, under no circumstances can people's independence benefit from doing regular things. Moreover, never can we ignore the significance of new things for personal innovations. To explain it further, when trying new things or risks, we need to solve many unprecedented problems by coming up with innovative ways, which can improve our innovative qualities. On the other hand, will regular stuff benefit people on innovations?
What is equally worth discussing is that doing new things and facing risks, instead of trying regular things, can improve people's professional development, by honing their competitive strength and benefiting their future promotion. First, the more people try new ways and take risks, the more they reap the benefits of career promotions. To be specific, by attempting new methods, people can improve their work efficiency, which will make them famous in the company, and so they will be more likely to be promoted in the future; however, old-fashioned ways can not be contractive to people's promotions. Additionally, never can we ignore the importance of new ways and taking risks for individual competitiveness. Specifically, when I invent an original algothrim doing a computer program, I will take advantage of this new algorithm by resolving computer science issues quicker, which can actually boost my competitive strength; on the contrary, the ordinary algorithm can not solve these problems more efficiently.
Sterling qualities, the foundation of people's development, can be boosted if they try new things and take risks. Professional development, the bedrock of people's success, can be facilitized if they use novel methods and courage to face some troubles. In conclusion, only by trying new things and taking risks, instead of employing old ways, can people reap and harvest numerous benefits.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, first, however, if, moreover, so, in conclusion, in contrast, such as, on the contrary, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 21.0 9.8082437276 214% => Less auxiliary verb wanted.
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 29.0 43.0788530466 67% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 15.0 8.0752688172 186% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2395.0 1977.66487455 121% => OK
No of words: 438.0 407.700716846 107% => OK
Chars per words: 5.46803652968 4.8611393121 112% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.57476223824 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.99312630385 2.67179642975 112% => OK
Unique words: 205.0 212.727598566 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.46803652968 0.524837075471 89% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 716.4 618.680645161 116% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 3.0 9.59856630824 31% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 15.0 4.94265232975 303% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 72.0281567397 48.9658058833 147% => OK
Chars per sentence: 140.882352941 100.406767564 140% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.7647058824 20.6045352989 125% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.94117647059 5.45110844103 146% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.290521336344 0.236089414692 123% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.120814641377 0.076458572812 158% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0767249313725 0.0737576698707 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.218697997235 0.150856017488 145% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0633008249643 0.0645574589148 98% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 17.2 11.7677419355 146% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 58.1214874552 79% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.1575268817 128% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 14.74 10.9000537634 135% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.63 8.01818996416 108% => OK
difficult_words: 104.0 86.8835125448 120% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 15.0 10.002688172 150% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 15.0 10.247311828 146% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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