Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Successful people try new things and take risks rather than only doing what they already know how to do well.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In today’s progressive world, it is very necessary to spend time and make an effort to learn something new and recognize of the the knowledge of subjects. Scientisct believed that, in order to learn specific major people should pay a lot of money and attention so if they want to be a success person in their life, they should not try something new and take risks. However, I am of the opinion that, I think it is better to take risks. The reasons to support my idea are illustrated in the following paragraphs.
To begin with, trying new topics makes an opportunity to become as a rich person and create the era which you can pay a lot of money and be succeed person in the life. For intstance, 10 years ago, I have graduate from chemistry major and worked as an lab assistant but I could not earn a lot of money. Therefore, I have tried to learn computer skills and leadership abilities which help me to run my own business and combine the chemistry and computer discipline and after a 10 yaers I’ve become as an rich and succeed person. If I had not took the risk 10 years ago, I would not be in the high position now.
Furthermore, taking the risk is not boring and makes an creativity in each individual. For Example, my brothere had been worked as a English teacher for 5 years and he had being in his safe zone, but suddenly he decided to change his way and try something new. Thus, he followed to learn computer and art concept. It was a hard decision because most of the family told him it is better to do which he used to before, but after a long time he could mix the teaching technices with art and computer skills in order to teach on a different way. Consequency, he became as a innovative English teacher in our city and it was a big achievement.
Having considered the above-mentioned into account,I strongly believed that, taking risks and learning new can make the people rich, succeed and innovatiove. So, It is a good idea to get away from our safe zone and start to adventure in life.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a word
Suggestion: the
...to learn something new and recognize of the the knowledge of subjects. Scientisct belie...
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Message: Maybe you need to remove one determiner so that only 'the' or 'the' is left.
Suggestion: the; the
...to learn something new and recognize of the the knowledge of subjects. Scientisct belie...
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Line 2, column 248, Rule ID: EN_A_VS_AN
Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...uate from chemistry major and worked as an lab assistant but I could not earn a lo...
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Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...ine and after a 10 yaers I’ve become as an rich and succeed person. If I had not t...
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Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'taken'.
Suggestion: taken
...n rich and succeed person. If I had not took the risk 10 years ago, I would not be i...
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Message: Use 'a' instead of 'an' if the following word doesn't start with a vowel sound, e.g. 'a sentence', 'a university'
Suggestion: a
...taking the risk is not boring and makes an creativity in each individual. For Exam...
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Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...Example, my brothere had been worked as a English teacher for 5 years and he had ...
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Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...ifferent way. Consequency, he became as a innovative English teacher in our city ...
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Message: Put a space after the comma
Suggestion: , I
...sidered the above-mentioned into account,I strongly believed that, taking risks an...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, furthermore, however, if, so, therefore, thus, for example, i think, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 24.0 13.8261648746 174% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 37.0 43.0788530466 86% => OK
Preposition: 45.0 52.1666666667 86% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1643.0 1977.66487455 83% => OK
No of words: 372.0 407.700716846 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.41666666667 4.8611393121 91% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.39173103935 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60113255437 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 189.0 212.727598566 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.508064516129 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 522.9 618.680645161 85% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.5606346965 48.9658058833 118% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.533333333 100.406767564 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.8 20.6045352989 120% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.8 5.45110844103 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.5376344086 163% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.140977237376 0.236089414692 60% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0454230239612 0.076458572812 59% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0394116467824 0.0737576698707 53% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0829126446855 0.150856017488 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0358753574211 0.0645574589148 56% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.8 11.7677419355 100% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 64.04 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 8.65 10.9000537634 79% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.42 8.01818996416 93% => OK
difficult_words: 61.0 86.8835125448 70% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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