Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? For success in a future job, the ability to relate well to people is more important than studying hard in school. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
I goes without saying that today’s progressive world where we live, being successful in the career is the greatest achievement of each individual. In order to obtain this achievement, people need to learn both the enough knowledge and gain special skills in a particular field. Also, every person can not take the same time to acquire skills and knowledge and they should concentrate on one side. It has a debate among psychologist that every individual should enable to use special skills and it would not happen if they did not learn the skills. I hold the view that, being capable to do well in job is more important to study hard to figure out the concepts. The reasons to support my idea are illustrate in the following paragraphs.
To begin with, it is no secret to anyone that studying hard can lead you to find out the science concepts but you can not obtain the required skills for doing job. Due to the fact that it is essential to learn the practical items and it is not obtained by the studying. For instance, Although I graduated with high GPA in Chemistry field, when I started to work as an Asistant in a laboratory, I could not enable to do any useful experiment there. Because I did not get the required skills and just knew the concept of science. As a result, I had spent the much time to learn the skills.
Furthermore, each career has critical challenges which you should think to find the solution. In most of the school books and resources, it hadn’t taught any ways to solve the issues and how could faced with challenges in an appropreite way. Therefore, when you worked and sense the real challenges directly it makes you to gain ability to be as a problem solving.
In conclusion, having considered the above-mentioned reasons into account, I firmly believe that achieving the required skills is more essential than studing hard in school. People experience new challenges and new things in their job which they did not familiar with them since before. Consequently, the ability of using the skills which they obtain from the experience working is the key of being professional in their career.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 3, Rule ID: NON3PRS_VERB[1]
Message: The pronoun 'I' must be used with a non-third-person form of a verb: 'go'
Suggestion: go
I goes without saying that today’s progressive...
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Line 1, column 698, Rule ID: BEEN_PART_AGREEMENT[1]
Message: Consider using a past participle here: 'illustrated'.
Suggestion: illustrated
...pts. The reasons to support my idea are illustrate in the following paragraphs. To begin ...
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Line 2, column 499, Rule ID: KNEW_NEW[1]
Message: Did you mean 'new'?
Suggestion: new
...id not get the required skills and just knew the concept of science. As a result, I ...
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Line 3, column 198, Rule ID: DID_BASEFORM[1]
Message: The verb 'could' requires the base form of the verb: 'face'
Suggestion: face
... ways to solve the issues and how could faced with challenges in an appropreite way. ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, furthermore, if, so, therefore, well, for instance, in conclusion, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 43.0788530466 84% => OK
Preposition: 53.0 52.1666666667 102% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1762.0 1977.66487455 89% => OK
No of words: 371.0 407.700716846 91% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.74932614555 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.38877662729 4.48103885553 98% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67684707758 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 200.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.539083557951 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 531.0 618.680645161 86% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 33.7026484436 48.9658058833 69% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.647058824 100.406767564 103% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.8235294118 20.6045352989 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.94117647059 5.45110844103 127% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.225958228238 0.236089414692 96% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.063305618209 0.076458572812 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0619812592431 0.0737576698707 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.126404906797 0.150856017488 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0253858329129 0.0645574589148 39% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 11.7677419355 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 67.08 58.1214874552 115% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.1 10.1575268817 90% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.27 10.9000537634 94% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.87 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 75.0 86.8835125448 86% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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