For success in a future job, the ability to relate well to people is more important than studying hard in school.
There is no shortage of opinions that studying hard in school is significant for success in the future. I have a different opinion. I believe that behaving well with people is a better choice. I feel this way for two reasons which I will explain in the following paragraphs.
To begin with, developing good relations with classmates in a school is beneficial for the students for the success in a future job because it will help them in increasing their team work skills. Moreover their communication skills and knowledge will be enhanced. Working in teams is effective in the development of any business. As a result, they will behave well with their colleagues and as well as with the customers. This is best exemplified by my personal experience.When I was in high school, my friends and I used to work together on projects and always shared our ideas.Hence I learned to work as a team in a school. When I started my job as a customer service representative I knew how to interact with the customers and coworkers which eventually helped me get success at my workplace.
Secondly, creating a social connection in school is also vital for the students because it will increase their social skills.Obviously, If they just study well and not make any friends they will not know how to behave with people. Furthermore, it will also strengthen their confidence to get success in the future. For instance, my brother used to be very social in his school life. When he started working in a car shop, he had good interactions with the customers. Therefore, he increased the sales of the company and got a promotion at work.
In conclusion, I have a firm belief that strong relationships with people not only improve the quality of working in a team at work but also boost the social connections with people which is crucial for getting the success at job.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, furthermore, hence, if, moreover, second, secondly, so, then, therefore, well, for instance, i feel, in conclusion, as a result, as well as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 38.0 43.0788530466 88% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 52.1666666667 84% => OK
Nominalization: 7.0 8.0752688172 87% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1538.0 1977.66487455 78% => OK
No of words: 322.0 407.700716846 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.77639751553 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23607819155 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.94044771833 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Unique words: 162.0 212.727598566 76% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.503105590062 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 468.0 618.680645161 76% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 64.674062614 48.9658058833 132% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.125 100.406767564 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.125 20.6045352989 98% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.3125 5.45110844103 189% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 8.0 5.5376344086 144% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.222792388706 0.236089414692 94% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0748033531812 0.076458572812 98% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0773122216678 0.0737576698707 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.154370331036 0.150856017488 102% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0461819454513 0.0645574589148 72% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 11.7677419355 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.44 10.9000537634 96% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.86 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 66.0 86.8835125448 76% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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