No one can deny that there are both positive and negative aspects of strengthen the relationships with other people especially in your career instead of obtain extremely high grades in university. If I were forced to choose, I would definitely select make relations with more people in my field to get advantages. It is my firm belief that people have a hidden power that affect on their success for a number of reasons, and I will develop these ideas in the subsequent paragraphs.
To begin with, relationships with people can allow numerous opportunities to achieve high places in your field without looking for your academic grades if they are high or low. I have to admit that my opinion on this matter has been profoundly influenced by my own personal experience. Before five years, after graduation from the university, I started to apply to many jobs like the other students, so after searching for 3 months I found a job in Qatar which located in Asia. I have worked there for many years with another friend studied with me at the same college, and he was from the top students in our major, but I was moderate student. During this time I made a lot of relations with employees and managers in this company, while my friend did his work without any external relations outside the work. As a result, right now I have a high position in my field and I am my friend's manager because of these relations with other employees. If my friend had made relations with others, He would have a promotion like me.
Secondly, relations can give you a chance to have work after graduation because friends can help each others in many aspects. Drawing from my own personal experience. My brother graduated from engineering college before three months. During his study he made a lot of relations in Jordanian Engineers Association by making volunteering events for undergraduates students. Consequently, after he graduates the corporation gave him a job to work with them because he was active and everyone loves him.
In conclusion, I strongly feel that ability to deal with people is more crucial than get high grades. This is because it can increase your position and promotions in your job, and can give you opportunity to have a job in easy way.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 373, Rule ID: AFFECT_EFFECT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'effect'?
Suggestion: effect
...ef that people have a hidden power that affect on their success for a number of reasons, ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, consequently, if, look, second, secondly, so, then, while, in conclusion, as a result, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 57.0 43.0788530466 132% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 65.0 52.1666666667 125% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1859.0 1977.66487455 94% => OK
No of words: 389.0 407.700716846 95% => OK
Chars per words: 4.77892030848 4.8611393121 98% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44106776838 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.73757315971 2.67179642975 102% => OK
Unique words: 209.0 212.727598566 98% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.537275064267 0.524837075471 102% => OK
syllable_count: 595.8 618.680645161 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 42.3508169402 48.9658058833 86% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.352941176 100.406767564 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.8823529412 20.6045352989 111% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.17647058824 5.45110844103 113% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.173267391451 0.236089414692 73% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0618162882241 0.076458572812 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0405398006766 0.0737576698707 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.126689554813 0.150856017488 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0400830126568 0.0645574589148 62% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 11.7677419355 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.74 10.9000537634 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.34 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 86.8835125448 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.5 10.002688172 145% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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