TPO-21- Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
For success in a future job, the ability to relate well to people is more important than studying hard in school.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
In today's world, people are in an intense challenge to achieve the success. In this regard, they should adapt themselves to all of the complicated methods to get to their goals. However, there are certain considerations and factors which every person ought to bear it in their mind to find the most faster way. When it comes to success in a future job, controversy surrounds the issue of whether people should improve their social abilities or study carefully. I am of the opinion that a successful person has to advance its social connections, and the following explanations will further elaborate on this perspective.
To begin with, a good social relationship with people will further enhance the chance of getting a promotion or other advance in comparison to regular employees in a working place. As a matter of fact, a person who talks eloquently and persuades everyone easily can be a suitable candidate for a business to achieve more customers and also create an intimate ambiance in the place. My friend Sam, for instance, has an excellent ability to make contact with people and this facilitates getting their company many advantages over their rivals. Thanks to his advance, he got several contracts for his business, and this has made him the most well-paid employee in the working place.
Also, the ability to relate well to others may open up a way for companies to cover their problems. Today, all factories and corporations compete to reach to a keen interest rate. This requires not only a careful planning but also an enormous amount of update knowledge. Thus, they acquire many methods to sell their products to their prospective customers. Perhaps my personal experience may shed more light on this matter. I worked in a firm which employed a cutting-edge technology in its recent product. Sadly, this led to a significant problem in the product and thus made customers aggressive towards our company. If we did not talk to the customers and make them sure that the firm would refund for their expenses, the company might have been going bankruptcy.
On the other hand, studying hard in school and getting a profound knowledge will let us create innovative things and methods. This is not possible without spending many hours in front of your desk and researching through all the fields of science. In essence, a gifted person would make it possible for the business holder likely to gain the edge over other competitors.
In sum, I am pretty convinced that there are many solid reasons to support the idea of having the ability to relate nicely to people rather than studying hard in school. While getting a deep understanding in several fields of study by studying hard will make us able to create more ideas, a good relation can always survive a business and also might make an employee to get promoted.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 125, Rule ID: ALL_OF_THE[1]
Message: Simply use 'all the'.
Suggestion: all the
...regard, they should adapt themselves to all of the complicated methods to get to their goa...
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Line 1, column 295, Rule ID: MOST_COMPARATIVE[1]
Message: Use only 'faster' (without 'most') when you use the comparative.
Suggestion: faster
...ht to bear it in their mind to find the most faster way. When it comes to success in a futu...
^^^^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, so, thus, well, while, as to, for instance, as a matter of fact, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 6.0 15.1003584229 40% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 15.0 9.8082437276 153% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 67.0 52.1666666667 128% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2354.0 1977.66487455 119% => OK
No of words: 479.0 407.700716846 117% => OK
Chars per words: 4.91440501044 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.67825486995 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6726676318 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 260.0 212.727598566 122% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.542797494781 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 740.7 618.680645161 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Interrogative: 1.0 0.994623655914 101% => OK
Article: 6.0 3.08781362007 194% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 40.3815736147 48.9658058833 82% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.0 100.406767564 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.7727272727 20.6045352989 106% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.72727272727 5.45110844103 105% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.183237767407 0.236089414692 78% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0506527335041 0.076458572812 66% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0577082026811 0.0737576698707 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.107091101638 0.150856017488 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0511795244649 0.0645574589148 79% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 11.7677419355 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.2 10.9000537634 103% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.47 8.01818996416 106% => OK
difficult_words: 115.0 86.8835125448 132% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.