No one can deny that there are both positive and negative aspects of the importance of the realtions between family members. If I were forced to choose, I would definetely select that relationships with the extended family in these days are less essential in comparison with the past. It is my firm belief every one should maintain his relations with his family, but with this massive pressure on indivisulas they can not keep bonds for a number of reasons, and I will develop these ideas in the subsequent paragraphs.
To begin with, rapid development in each one's life keeps him busy with his personal issues, so people can not stay in communication because of these matters. I have to admit that my opinion on this matter has been profoundly influenced by my own personal experience. before ten years, when my family and me were lived in a village, our neighboors were my grandparents and my uncles, so we meet them everyday to speak about our daily activites or our proplems. Subsequently, after move to a big city we were always busy with our new life like work and universites, so the connection with our family has declined. On top of that, nowdays everyone care about his passion only without following and focusing on the others. If I had staied in my last home, I would have highly relations with family.
Secondly, the new generation mind's are less intersted in keep relations with other family members. Drawing from my own experience. Until now, I still make some connection with my aunts and uncles, but my brother who has eleven years old, did not make any interaction with our family, this is because he always busy with playing computer games and dealing with his friends. However, this new generation has odd concepts and belifes about family bond. Neverthless, my father inviting his sisters to a dinner every month, in a way of keeping this connection, but with days how knows that will change.
In conclusion, I strongly feel that in these days relations are less paramount. This is because people have extra responsibilities and ideas changes with the passage of time.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 268, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Before
...fluenced by my own personal experience. before ten years, when my family and me were l...
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Line 3, column 400, Rule ID: EVERYDAY_EVERY_DAY[3]
Message: 'Everyday' is an adjective. Did you mean 'every day'?
Suggestion: every day
...dparents and my uncles, so we meet them everyday to speak about our daily activites or o...
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Line 5, column 217, Rule ID: HAVE_CD_YEARS[1]
Message: This phrase is used with 'be': 'is eleven years old'.
Suggestion: is eleven years old
...my aunts and uncles, but my brother who has eleven years old, did not make any interaction with our ...
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Line 5, column 495, Rule ID: HAVE_A_BREAKFAST[2]
Message: When we speak of types of meals, the article is not required: 'to dinner'.
Suggestion: to dinner
...rthless, my father inviting his sisters to a dinner every month, in a way of keeping this c...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, second, secondly, so, still, in conclusion, to begin with, on top of that
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 55.0 43.0788530466 128% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 55.0 52.1666666667 105% => OK
Nominalization: 11.0 8.0752688172 136% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1740.0 1977.66487455 88% => OK
No of words: 359.0 407.700716846 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.84679665738 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.35284910392 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69141616104 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 200.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.557103064067 0.524837075471 106% => OK
syllable_count: 552.6 618.680645161 89% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 6.0 3.51792114695 171% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 56.3626302948 48.9658058833 115% => OK
Chars per sentence: 108.75 100.406767564 108% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.4375 20.6045352989 109% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.6875 5.45110844103 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.158920480937 0.236089414692 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0562802515338 0.076458572812 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0465760618692 0.0737576698707 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.10282972612 0.150856017488 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0370959486251 0.0645574589148 57% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.6 11.7677419355 107% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.15 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.11 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 77.0 86.8835125448 89% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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