Some people believe that when busy parents do not have a lot of time to spend with their children, the best use of that time is to have fun playing games or sports. Others believe that it is best to use that time doing things together that are related to schoolwork. Which of the two approaches do you prefer? Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer
There is no shortage of opinions that parents should do some schoolwork with their children when they have some free time. The kids will then always be vigilant about their work completion on time and take it more seriously. I have a different opinion. I strongly believe that parents should spent some fun time with their kids. In the following essay, I intended to put forth two reasons to support my viewpoint.
To begin with, the first exquisite point to be mentioned is that spending some fun time with kids provides an opportunity to them to make some special bond with their parents. For example, nowadays parents spend some quality time with their kids by playing online games or watching movies together. In the past, they always had some distance between them. They don't watch any movies or play any games as it is against the norm of society. It is very essential for kids to have a healthy relationship with their parents because in this way they discuss any topic of their life without hesitation. As a kid is growing, they have a lot of questions in their developing brain and it is important that they discuss them with their parents. Thus, having an amused time with children is actually beneficial.
Second to all, playing some sports with children is advantageous because it may develop a good habit of playing sports and keeping yourself healthy in the kids. For instance, my physical education teacher's son is a renowned basketball player because his father always plays basketball with him.On the other hand, although I always wish to be a sports person but cannot achieve my goal as I don't have any support system that leads to success. It is so rewarding to the children if their parents are involved with them in some fun activities since it will help them to boost their confidence and also give them moral support in their future endeavors.
To conclude, the issue of whether parents should play some fun sports with their kids or not is complex. Some have suggested that it may decrease their respect because they become more frank. Nevertheless, I still contend that playing games and sports are very beneficial and rewarding and they have a wholly encouraging effect on their behavior.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, also, but, first, if, may, nevertheless, second, so, still, then, thus, for example, for instance, to begin with, on the other hand
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 57.0 43.0788530466 132% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1845.0 1977.66487455 93% => OK
No of words: 381.0 407.700716846 93% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.84251968504 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.41805628031 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.46318152917 2.67179642975 92% => OK
Unique words: 190.0 212.727598566 89% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.498687664042 0.524837075471 95% => OK
syllable_count: 554.4 618.680645161 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 59.2260005049 48.9658058833 121% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.5 100.406767564 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.1666666667 20.6045352989 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.83333333333 5.45110844103 144% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.35509210671 0.236089414692 150% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.132578353315 0.076458572812 173% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.08442220297 0.0737576698707 114% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.23820831874 0.150856017488 158% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0634205422098 0.0645574589148 98% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.0 11.7677419355 102% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.79 10.9000537634 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.83 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 76.0 86.8835125448 87% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.5 10.002688172 75% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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