Do you agree or disagree with the following statement Television advertising directed towards young children aged two to five should not be allowed Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer

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Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Television advertising directed towards young children (aged two to five) should not be allowed. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

In today's progressive world, all individuals with a different age range, are exposed to access variety source of information such as media, television, radio and... .under such circumastance, it is very important to have control on advertisement which not allowed to watch by children. the reasons to support my idea are illustrated in the following paragraphs.
To begin with, it goes without saying each of show or program that are broadcast on television follow the special policy to organize it for special group of audience. In today's develpment market, every company are trying to have more influential in marketing to produce their items more without considering negative effect that might have in their advertisement. Therefore in this competition situation, some groups of audience such as children are susceptible target to hurt mentality and physchologity.
for instance, the most commercial junk food in iran belongs to "CHe Toz" company, which use the children to effect more on kids in this advertisement. two children are eating the product and after that, they will be stronger than usual so they would have do everything and achieve their goals.. In this regards, parents should control their children to avoid watching this commercial.
Furthermore, some advertisement convey hidden negative behave which could change the behavior of kids without noticing. For example, in one particular program, a boy who play with a ball and be upset, are stealing the toll from the girl and it makes him happy. Undeniably this commercial have aims to promote their toll as their product but in the other hand, this can encourage the kids to steal something. As a result, the advertisement have negative message inside.
In conclusion, I am of the opinion that advertisement should not be allowed for children. So the parents and government should control more on this way , becoause this can influence in the future of children.

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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, furthermore, if, so, therefore, for example, for instance, in conclusion, such as, as a result, to begin with

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 9.0 13.8261648746 65% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 27.0 43.0788530466 63% => OK
Preposition: 50.0 52.1666666667 96% => OK
Nominalization: 16.0 8.0752688172 198% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1636.0 1977.66487455 83% => OK
No of words: 311.0 407.700716846 76% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.26045016077 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.19942759058 4.48103885553 94% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.95434246187 2.67179642975 111% => OK
Unique words: 180.0 212.727598566 85% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.578778135048 0.524837075471 110% => OK
syllable_count: 507.6 618.680645161 82% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 5.0 9.59856630824 52% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 15.0 20.6003584229 73% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 36.3623737155 48.9658058833 74% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.066666667 100.406767564 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.7333333333 20.6045352989 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 7.6 5.45110844103 139% => OK
Paragraphs: 5.0 4.53405017921 110% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.5376344086 163% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 3.0 4.88709677419 61% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.167451767403 0.236089414692 71% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.062477425708 0.076458572812 82% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0504591568782 0.0737576698707 68% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0998465785223 0.150856017488 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0436187174729 0.0645574589148 68% => OK

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.7 11.7677419355 116% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.23 10.9000537634 121% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.79 8.01818996416 110% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 86.8835125448 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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