Having a long history, advertisements have now become part of our daily lives. The fact that we can't even go through a day without seeing any advertisements requires that advertising should be strictly managed to not cause harm to any population. With that in mind, I am of the opinion that advertising targeting young children should be banned or restricted.
First of all, it is the characteristics of kid advertisements that suggest they should not be allowed on television or any other platforms. To be specific, commercial videos for children products are often misleading, whereas our kids are not consciously mature enough to recognize and differentiate between what is real and what is invented. There was once a bubblegum advertisement for kids that featured wild animals such as bears and snakes having fun in a bubblegum blowing competition. To the adults in my family, it appeared a cute, funny ad, but little did we know our young members took it differently. My niece wanted to compete blowing gum with an actual snake and had attempted to approach a snake in the backyard without acknowledging snakes can be dangerous and deadly. The funny thing was my little niece chose to believe in the ad and not in us, indicating commercial videos directed towards young children can have a strong power and influence on them. In the end, my family had to educate the young kids on a daily basic about wildlife animals so they would have a more realistic perception of what is out there.
Furthermore, although advertisements for children products are for the youngsters to watch, they seem to put a strong purchasing pressure on parents. In actuality, we have at least once in our lives witnessed a kid crying in the mall for a toy he wanted. It is safe to say part of such disobedient behaviors can be blamed on children commercial ads. This is especially the case when the ad features a well-known character among kids, or shows that all the other kids have already owned the item. As a result, parents, in order to satiate their children's demand, have to follow kid's trend by buying the most popular products on the shelves. This is neither beneficial for the parents nor the kids themselves since most kid-targeted advertisement are for unnecessary or harmful items such as toys and sweetened snacks. It is true marketing and advertising are to stimulate consumerism, yet teaching and triggering that value in young children doesn’t seem appropriate.
In conclusion, I oppose the broadcast of advertising that is directed at the young population. This is because I don’t feel kid advertising is doing a good job at orienting its little audience to the right thing, and that it is both unnecessary and inappropriate to target at children.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 1, column 97, Rule ID: CANT[1]
Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, furthermore, if, so, well, whereas, as to, at least, in conclusion, such as, as a result, first of all, it is true
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 15.1003584229 166% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 19.0 13.8261648746 137% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 42.0 43.0788530466 97% => OK
Preposition: 58.0 52.1666666667 111% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2296.0 1977.66487455 116% => OK
No of words: 464.0 407.700716846 114% => OK
Chars per words: 4.94827586207 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64119157421 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 3.00186971067 2.67179642975 112% => OK
Unique words: 244.0 212.727598566 115% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.525862068966 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 706.5 618.680645161 114% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 13.0 9.59856630824 135% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.4936462896 48.9658058833 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 120.842105263 100.406767564 120% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.4210526316 20.6045352989 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.63157894737 5.45110844103 122% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.17393486465 0.236089414692 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0618575100163 0.076458572812 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0523582693262 0.0737576698707 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.117159750962 0.150856017488 78% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0306703662485 0.0645574589148 48% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.1 11.7677419355 120% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 58.1214874552 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.73 10.9000537634 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.33 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 103.0 86.8835125448 119% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 80.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 24.0 Out of 30
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