Societies have evolved significantly throughout history, bringing major changes in the roles of each human being, especially in family. While young people's choice of life were decided by their parents in the previous centuries; it is delightful see the modern shift in which young generations make their own life decisions.
There is no doubt parents in the past loved to take control of every aspect of their children's life, from education to marriage and career. First, past mothers and fathers believed the choices they made on behalf of their children were the best options for a promising life. For example, they would find their daughter a decent husband who was probably born in a wealthy family without her being aware of it. As a result, this practice became a norm in the old society and led to many young girls waiting to be married through the help from their parents' social relationships. Second, it is safe to say that parents in history were regarded as the most respected in a family for being the senior in the house. For this reason, they were thought of as experienced life-leaders who ultimately knew life better and thus were the ones who should make decisions on behalf of their young children. Many young people were forced to take over family's traditional career or join the military this way, even if their heart desired something else. How their lives would turn out heavily relied on their parents' important decisions.
Fortunately, as the world developed to be more and more civilized, the young have became ones to lead their own lives as how they want it to be. Young people have become much more independent on their parents or anyone else than before. With the great help of broad education, young ones are able to grasp a better understanding of how the world works as they experience and learn in life. It's time their parents are sorted to be the old-fashioned and less competent, and thus, not worth asking a piece of advice since they mostly wouldn't know. For instance, most parents probably can't advise their son on whether to take computer science or health science since those are beyond their expertise. Additionally, as society places more emphasis on individuality, modern youngsters are trained to know themselves better than anyone else. Consequently, young people don't seem to rely on anyone when it comes to making decisions or picking a way for their own lives. Nowadays, it's not uncommon to see the young move out as early as they can and try to building their lives through their self-calculated choices and plans.
In conclusion, there are several reasons as why there was a big change in the role of parents in directing and orientating their children through the act of making important decisions for them. This is a good shift in humankind as it prepares young people for the world by having them make life decisions and be responsible for their own choices.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Use past participle here: 'become'.
Suggestion: become
...more and more civilized, the young have became ones to lead their own lives as how the...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: wouldn't
...ing a piece of advice since they mostly wouldnt know. For instance, most parents probab...
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Message: Did you mean 'can't' or 'cannot'?
Suggestion: can't; cannot
...ow. For instance, most parents probably cant advise their son on whether to take com...
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Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: don't
...anyone else. Consequently, young people dont seem to rely on anyone when it comes to...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
consequently, first, if, second, so, thus, while, for example, for instance, in conclusion, no doubt, as a result
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 25.0 15.1003584229 166% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 16.0 13.8261648746 116% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 45.0 43.0788530466 104% => OK
Preposition: 69.0 52.1666666667 132% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2424.0 1977.66487455 123% => OK
No of words: 497.0 407.700716846 122% => OK
Chars per words: 4.87726358149 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.72159896747 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.5823568174 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 252.0 212.727598566 118% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.507042253521 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 745.2 618.680645161 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 26.3580632824 48.9658058833 54% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 121.2 100.406767564 121% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.85 20.6045352989 121% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.65 5.45110844103 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.364655567578 0.236089414692 154% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.125426723816 0.076458572812 164% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0828285301204 0.0737576698707 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.257355423994 0.150856017488 171% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.053033755576 0.0645574589148 82% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.0 11.7677419355 119% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 55.58 58.1214874552 96% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.32 10.9000537634 104% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.19 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 106.0 86.8835125448 122% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 13.5 10.002688172 135% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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