Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Successful people try new things and take risks rather than only doing what they already know how to do well.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Some people argue that taking risks and trying something novice is not a easy tasks because risk is a synonyms of failure, and remaining in comfort zone helps to get ease from anxiety after becoming failure. However, I strongly disagree with these people and believe that renown people always take risks and try new things than doing same banal tasks. I will support my view point for following two reasons.
To begin with, successful people always try new stuff and take risks because they are able to detect foreseen opportunities than often ignored by the ordinary people. In other words, successful people know that taking risks may be hard, but it has more succeed than one ever dreamed. For instance, when I was child, my father was so curious in taking risk and doing different tasks such as cooking, painting, creating mini-crafts, gardening, plumbering and so forth, at the same time my mother used to be so depressed and upset because my dad was not able to make money. So, my dad take a risk to training center to give training on different stuffs. Nonetheless, with in couple of months training center was flourished so fast that we became millionaire. It is important to recognize the unforeseen opportunities because it helps to make people success by creating various critical strategy. Thus, successful can easily prescience the hidden opportunities to be succeed.
Secondly, well-known people always take new things in their life because trying new things build confidence and practical skills which ultimately brings success. My own compelling example of this. When I was child, I used to be scared with water and have a kind of hydrophobia. Later on, I decided to take risks to jump in swimming pool, afterwards I was able to swim perfectly slowly. Although, I felt suffocation early, now I am swimming campion of my state and able to won various gold medals and award. If l had not take risk to swimming, then obviously people still called me coward, and lose my confidence. It is pivotal to have confidence and practical skills because without practical skills no one can compete to this competitive globalization world, and achieve success in life. Therefore, successful people are often confident and have huge life skills by taking risks.
To sum up, the issue of whether successful people try new things and take risks rather than becoming stuck in banal stuff is complex. Some people suggested that taking risk makes people upset and make failure forever to support their points. Nevertheless, I still condend that successful people always try new things and risks to build confidence and prescience gigantic opportunities to be success in life.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Use 'an' instead of 'a' if the following word starts with a vowel sound, e.g. 'an article', 'an hour'
Suggestion: an
...isks and trying something novice is not a easy tasks because risk is a synonyms o...
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Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'a synonym' or simply 'synonyms'?
Suggestion: a synonym; synonyms
...ice is not a easy tasks because risk is a synonyms of failure, and remaining in comfort zo...
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Line 5, column 307, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'risks jumping'.
Suggestion: risks jumping
...ydrophobia. Later on, I decided to take risks to jump in swimming pool, afterwards I was able...
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Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'taken'.
Suggestion: taken
...ous gold medals and award. If l had not take risk to swimming, then obviously people...
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Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
... prescience gigantic opportunities to be success in life.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, however, if, may, nevertheless, nonetheless, second, secondly, so, still, then, therefore, thus, well, for instance, kind of, such as, in other words, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 21.0 13.8261648746 152% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 43.0788530466 84% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2258.0 1977.66487455 114% => OK
No of words: 445.0 407.700716846 109% => OK
Chars per words: 5.07415730337 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.59293186426 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.67783148592 2.67179642975 100% => OK
Unique words: 227.0 212.727598566 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.510112359551 0.524837075471 97% => OK
syllable_count: 683.1 618.680645161 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 11.0 9.59856630824 115% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 54.5835189798 48.9658058833 111% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.523809524 100.406767564 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.1904761905 20.6045352989 103% => OK
Discourse Markers: 8.57142857143 5.45110844103 157% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 13.0 11.8709677419 110% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 7.0 3.85842293907 181% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.297480936891 0.236089414692 126% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0933345772239 0.076458572812 122% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0759504929145 0.0737576698707 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.203986087057 0.150856017488 135% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0477759595171 0.0645574589148 74% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.0 11.7677419355 110% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.13 10.9000537634 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.77 8.01818996416 97% => OK
difficult_words: 87.0 86.8835125448 100% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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