Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
For success in a future job, the ability to relate well to people is more important than studying hard in school.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer
Some people argue that for succeed in career , student should be laborious in school rather than capability to relate well to people. They cite that diligent student never has to build relationship with other to success in future job as company usually detect the skills of individual, but not how they relate other at work place. However, I strongly disagree with these people and believe that having the ability to relate to others and their position or viewpoint is far pivotal than studying laborious in school for following two reasons.
To begin with, having the ability to connect with others is crucial in business because it helps to facilitates idea generation and creativity. For instance, Bills Gates would not hit the sales of billions from his Microsoft company if he did not persuade his friends and generated their own creativity to establish the world top renown company, instead of just being book worm. It is important to generate ideas and creativeness because it is way to success and by creativity people can innovate different technologies in behalf of mankind. Thus, capability of connecting with others actually helps to generating brilliant ideas and innovations.
Furthermore, ability to maintaining empathy among the co-workers or in the eye of boss helps to disseminate good impression and previlage among boss and which ultimately enhances the career of individual. For example, one of my uncles is gold medalist as he was batch topper of his generation and have outstanding GPA. Unfortunately, he was unable to impress and connect to his co-workers as a result he had to resigned his job. In contrast, my one of friends is so ingenious that despite of his low GPA, he got position of general manager in well-known company. In fact, he has ability to persuading the other people so that he always flatter his CEO of the company. It is important to propagate good impression with other because this strategy helps to uplift the career of individual. Therefore, ability to spreading empathy can helps to succeed in life.
To sum up, the issue of whether the ability to relate well to others is more crucial than studying hard in school in order to success in future career is complex. Some suggested that doing hard and persistence in study helps to makes automatically in life. Nevertheless, I still contend that for success in job one should have ability to connect with others and that helps to make people creative and disseminated good impression for own productivity.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: The verb after "to" should be in the base form: 'facilitate'.
Suggestion: facilitate
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Message: The verb 'can' requires the base form of the verb: 'help'
Suggestion: help
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Suggestion:
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Message: The verb after "to" should be in the base form: 'make'.
Suggestion: make
... hard and persistence in study helps to makes automatically in life. Nevertheless, I ...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, but, furthermore, however, if, nevertheless, so, still, therefore, thus, well, as to, for example, for instance, in contrast, in fact, as a result, to begin with, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 5.0 9.8082437276 51% => OK
Conjunction : 17.0 13.8261648746 123% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 36.0 43.0788530466 84% => OK
Preposition: 75.0 52.1666666667 144% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2106.0 1977.66487455 106% => OK
No of words: 416.0 407.700716846 102% => OK
Chars per words: 5.0625 4.8611393121 104% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.51620172871 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80842276211 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 205.0 212.727598566 96% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.492788461538 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 668.7 618.680645161 108% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 24.0 20.1344086022 119% => OK
Sentence length SD: 46.2861567264 48.9658058833 95% => OK
Chars per sentence: 123.882352941 100.406767564 123% => OK
Words per sentence: 24.4705882353 20.6045352989 119% => OK
Discourse Markers: 10.7058823529 5.45110844103 196% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 0.0 4.88709677419 0% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.248144551802 0.236089414692 105% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0865998989347 0.076458572812 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0775720618714 0.0737576698707 105% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.179653620893 0.150856017488 119% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.108154377689 0.0645574589148 168% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 14.6 11.7677419355 124% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 47.12 58.1214874552 81% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 12.7 10.1575268817 125% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.36 10.9000537634 113% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.39 8.01818996416 105% => OK
difficult_words: 94.0 86.8835125448 108% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.6 10.0537634409 115% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 71.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.5 Out of 30
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