Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
Successful people try new things and take risks rather than only doing what they already know how to do well.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Considering that there are new findings each moment of our lives I believe many successful people try new things and take risks every day to reach better reasults. I will dicuss my reasonings in the following essay.
First, the environment, science, and economy are everchanging, bringing about new opportunities and knowledge every day. Based on such improvements and changes, if appropriate actions and approaches are not taken great losses may occure. For example, in todays society with social network applications popularity, newspaper and more traditional ways of advertisement and shopping are becoming less appreciated; if an enterperneur continues following tradition using newspapers and television to advertise their products, not changing his approaches and doesn't follow the trends they may incure serious losses to their business, considering other companies employ social media and newer styles of advertising for their products which will lead to other companies appliances overshadowing the products of such companies.
Second, all people need to consider new ways and approaches to improve themselves even if the changes seem hard to inact as the saying goes "no pain, no gain". No one can expect to become better without challenging themselves to new things. For example, a student is used to studying in a particular way can take a risk and put their time and energy into challenging a new style of studying this risk may lead them to better results, allowing them to find a better way of understanding their courses at the same time it may not lead to better results, nevertheless, it may become an experience usable in future endeavors afterall, if you don't tread upon new land you may never find a better place.
Based on the above reasonings I believe that successful people challenge themselves in many new ways and take risks to rise to better positions.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you mean 'after all'?
Suggestion: after all
...n experience usable in future endeavors afterall, if you dont tread upon new land you ma...
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Suggestion: don't
...le in future endeavors afterall, if you dont tread upon new land you may never find ...
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Line 4, column 111, Rule ID: ADMIT_ENJOY_VB[1]
Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'risks rising'.
Suggestion: risks rising
...ge themselves in many new ways and take risks to rise to better positions.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, may, nevertheless, second, so, for example
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 5.0 15.1003584229 33% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 3.0 11.0286738351 27% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 24.0 43.0788530466 56% => OK
Preposition: 37.0 52.1666666667 71% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1592.0 1977.66487455 80% => OK
No of words: 302.0 407.700716846 74% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.27152317881 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.1687104957 4.48103885553 93% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.96607427362 2.67179642975 111% => OK
Unique words: 175.0 212.727598566 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.579470198675 0.524837075471 110% => OK
syllable_count: 493.2 618.680645161 80% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 2.0 9.59856630824 21% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 9.0 20.6003584229 44% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 33.0 20.1344086022 164% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 171.517914696 48.9658058833 350% => The lengths of sentences changed so frequently.
Chars per sentence: 176.888888889 100.406767564 176% => OK
Words per sentence: 33.5555555556 20.6045352989 163% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.88888888889 5.45110844103 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 7.0 11.8709677419 59% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.135645866137 0.236089414692 57% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0637204161942 0.076458572812 83% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.052017543834 0.0737576698707 71% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.110856699496 0.150856017488 73% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0538800797631 0.0645574589148 83% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 20.2 11.7677419355 172% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 37.98 58.1214874552 65% => OK
smog_index: 11.2 6.10430107527 183% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 16.2 10.1575268817 159% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.88 10.9000537634 127% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.4 8.01818996416 117% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 86.8835125448 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.5 10.002688172 125% => OK
gunning_fog: 15.2 10.0537634409 151% => OK
text_standard: 16.0 10.247311828 156% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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