It is commonly believed that in life, success is not the most important thing; it is more important to remain happy and optimistic when we fail. Do you agree with that idea?
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer Be sure to use your own words Do not use memorized examples
The difinition of success, is different for each person.Therefore, there has been extensive debate on whether it is more important to succeed in our job and studies or to remain happy and optimistic even when we fail. I believe, it is better to have an optimistic view on life and feel happy with ourselves rather than putting importance on success. I will discuss my reason for this notion in the following essay.
First, having pessimistic thoughts can lead to wasting time. It is better to learn from our failures and return stronger rather than wallow in misery and wast our time by thinking about our failures. For example, I studied hard for admission exams in my last year of elementary school, so I could get admitted to better schools for my junior high school education. after the my first exam I knew that I did terrible and wouldn't get accepted into my first choice of school. However, I thought positively and tried harder for the next exam that was two weeks later. Consequently, I did fairly well and got accepted into my second choice. Based on this experience I believe that by not overthinking about my failures I succeeded in the end so thinking positively about the next opportunity and grabbing onto it helped me alot.
Second, stress is one of the biggest reason for health issues. By pressuring ourselves to succeed all the time we will feel stressed this will lead to declining mental and physical health. For example, there was a point in my life where I was very stressed about fnishing a project and making a good impression on my advisor this led me to have nervous break downs I started crying suddenly and would feel down all the time. Concurrently, I started losing sleep and my bodies health detoriorted. At the end I couldn't exhibit the best of my abilities, which led to a mediocre project. Therefore, I believe if I had executed my work without thinking of the outcome I would have been in better health leading to better execution of my assignment.
In conclusion, even though I believe it is important to think of success it is essential to have an optimistic outlook in our lives. Because not only being optimistic helps with optimal usage of time but also helps in keeping us healthy.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, consequently, first, however, if, look, second, so, therefore, well, for example, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 7.0 9.8082437276 71% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 6.0 11.0286738351 54% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 56.0 43.0788530466 130% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 54.0 52.1666666667 104% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1837.0 1977.66487455 93% => OK
No of words: 390.0 407.700716846 96% => OK
Chars per words: 4.71025641026 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.44391917772 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.69885528611 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 210.0 212.727598566 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.538461538462 0.524837075471 103% => OK
syllable_count: 575.1 618.680645161 93% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 51.9113976876 48.9658058833 106% => OK
Chars per sentence: 102.055555556 100.406767564 102% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.6666666667 20.6045352989 105% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.88888888889 5.45110844103 108% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 6.0 5.5376344086 108% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.103553240884 0.236089414692 44% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0376436444667 0.076458572812 49% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0596299856159 0.0737576698707 81% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0995626884341 0.150856017488 66% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0921787537148 0.0645574589148 143% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.6 11.7677419355 99% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 58.62 58.1214874552 101% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.3 10.1575268817 101% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.04 10.9000537634 92% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.12 8.01818996416 101% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 86.8835125448 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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