It is commonly believed that in life, success is not the most important thing; it is more important to remain happy and optimistic when we fail. Do you agree with that idea?
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer Be sure to use your own words Do not use memorized examples
Success is the meaning of life for many people, which can be defined variously. Some people think of success as the victory, money, and social position that one earns during a lifetime. For me, it is reaching the goals of one's life, no matter how superficial they seem. In this vein, some people believe that being successful in life is the most important issue, while others hold the opposite view, thinking that remaining positive and cheerful while facing failure is more vital. I, personally, definitely concur with the latter group for two primary reasons, on which I will elaborate in the following paragraphs.
First, keeping cheered up after defeat preserves mental health, which is the most important achievement and awards further success in life. To be more specific, even though being prosperous and making a plethora of money is important, it is not more important than staying healthy either physically or intellectually. Accordingly, people have to not let sparkles of mundane concerns blind them and prevent them from seeing the truth. By being happy after not obtaining victory, individuals can reduce their stress levels and anxiety, which in turn not only improves their health state but also paves the way for being successful in the future. Besides, an open, calm, and stress-free mind is more potent in making creative thoughts so as to flourish the career.
Second, each failing bestows experiences that enlighten the glory path; this is what one can gain by not feeling broken after countering each obstacle and not being able to pass it. Indeed, one of the main sources for human beings to collect the required equipment for being successful is attaining various experiences. In order to implement this matter, one can have a positive attitude toward experiencing a failure and think of that as "a way that does not end to the determined goal." In this way, happy emotions make one's eyes wide open to new skills that can be applied in future situations. I take myself as an example to clarify this complex context. When I was at Tehran University, I used to exert my affairs in a chaotic manner without making plans. As a fresh student, I wasn't familiar with the significance of making a plan and dedicating a reasonable amount of time to each lesson. After the midterm exams, I received a few bad grades even though I had tried my best to get prepared. Back then, despite the fact that I was not satisfied with my performance in those lessons, I was so happy that I could realize the importance of planning soon enough to compensate. Therefore, I arranged my tasks for the rest of the semester and passed those lessons successfully, which could not happen without the valuable experience gained from my failure.
In sum, sensing joy after every failure is more crucial than earning success. This is because not only it advances mental health but also gives a sum of experiences that might eventually bring reputation and money for people.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, besides, but, first, if, second, so, then, therefore, while, as to
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 24.0 15.1003584229 159% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 45.0 43.0788530466 104% => OK
Preposition: 59.0 52.1666666667 113% => OK
Nominalization: 9.0 8.0752688172 111% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2479.0 1977.66487455 125% => OK
No of words: 501.0 407.700716846 123% => OK
Chars per words: 4.94810379242 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.73107062784 4.48103885553 106% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64676679754 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 287.0 212.727598566 135% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.572854291417 0.524837075471 109% => OK
syllable_count: 768.6 618.680645161 124% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 9.0 4.94265232975 182% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 23.0 20.1344086022 114% => OK
Sentence length SD: 53.5924826353 48.9658058833 109% => OK
Chars per sentence: 118.047619048 100.406767564 118% => OK
Words per sentence: 23.8571428571 20.6045352989 116% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.04761904762 5.45110844103 74% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.170039319458 0.236089414692 72% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0481937243098 0.076458572812 63% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0422006495437 0.0737576698707 57% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.098370546402 0.150856017488 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0423451939454 0.0645574589148 66% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 11.7677419355 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 56.59 58.1214874552 97% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.73 10.9000537634 108% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.13 8.01818996416 114% => OK
difficult_words: 138.0 86.8835125448 159% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 11.2 10.0537634409 111% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 83.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 25.0 Out of 30
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