Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Today, with the development of technology and the industrial revolution, most families have a television in their house. Televisions have revolutionized the style of living. This matter that whether the television has a significant impact on young people or not is a controversial issue between people. Some people believe that television has made a contribution to people's lives, however, others think that television plays a negative role in young people's behavior. I, agree with the last belief for two reasons that I will explain them in the following essay.
The first noteworthy point regarding this issue is that television programs contain many violent scenes and there are many bad languages in these programs. Young people are not mature enough and they cannot distinguish between wrong and right behaviors. They may copy these negative behaviors and they can do these manners in life. For example, my nephew spent a lot of time in watching television when he was a young man. Because he usually watched violent movies, he had a conflict with their friends and he did not get rid of violence until adulthood.
Moreover, television programs can affect physical health. Today, young people spend most of their time in front of the television. They do not do any exercise. Television can threaten young people's life. Young people may get some diseases like obesity. Studies have shown that many young people in developed and undeveloped countries get obesity.
All in all, by considering the mentioned ideas, I think that the negative effects of television on young people are more than its positive effects. It is due to the fact that these people may imitate the bad behaviors and do them in society, and television prevents people from doing exercise, hence they may get sick.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, hence, however, if, may, moreover, regarding, so, for example, i think
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 7.0 15.1003584229 46% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 9.0 9.8082437276 92% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 9.0 11.0286738351 82% => OK
Pronoun: 33.0 43.0788530466 77% => OK
Preposition: 31.0 52.1666666667 59% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1497.0 1977.66487455 76% => OK
No of words: 293.0 407.700716846 72% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.10921501706 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.13729897018 4.48103885553 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6909612533 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 160.0 212.727598566 75% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.546075085324 0.524837075471 104% => OK
syllable_count: 468.9 618.680645161 76% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 42.8873056703 48.9658058833 88% => OK
Chars per sentence: 83.1666666667 100.406767564 83% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.2777777778 20.6045352989 79% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.55555555556 5.45110844103 84% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 5.0 11.8709677419 42% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 6.0 3.85842293907 156% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.269313242149 0.236089414692 114% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0889232582823 0.076458572812 116% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0531565111588 0.0737576698707 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.176563570292 0.150856017488 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0624219249671 0.0645574589148 97% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.8 11.7677419355 92% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 55.24 58.1214874552 95% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.06 10.9000537634 111% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.36 8.01818996416 104% => OK
difficult_words: 73.0 86.8835125448 84% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 10.5 10.002688172 105% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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