Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer

First reason coming to my mind is that psychologically, one of the best ways to spend your leisure time is watching TV. All of the governments around the world establish organizations to manage the programs and movies are shown on the TV. This organization produce programs, which are not only attractive but also educative, therefore young people can enlarge their scope of knowledge at the time they rest. The Japan Government conducted the pilot research group to investigate whether The TV has a positive effect on children or not, the experts have found that there is a correlation between the time students spend in front of the TV to follow educative programs and movies, which include educative issues and their school and university performances. For this reason, I believe that it is worthwhile for youth to spend their rest time in front of the TV.
It is also the fact that medicinally, TV helps youth to behave more polite since they try to imitate in the way their favorite actor behaves. Because of the fact that every government controls the TV programs and movies are producing in their country, they have an extremely good effect on young people in the society. My own experience is the compelling example of this. As I was the high school student I faced a financial problem and had to work part-time. I had to handle job and studies at the same time. As a high school student, it was really hard for me since all of my peers were just responsible for studying and improve their school performances. There was a TV program, which I followed in which a boy tried hard to work to earn money to buy school materials, at the end of the program he became a famous doctor. It really had a positive effect on me and made me try hard and the boy was my role model in life, who I behaved the same as. Accordingly, I feel that it is rational for young people to watch TV programs, as it has a positive effect on the way they behave.

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Average: 7.3 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: All the
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Suggestion: Because
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
accordingly, also, but, first, if, really, so, therefore, while, i feel

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 1.0 9.8082437276 10% => OK
Conjunction : 12.0 13.8261648746 87% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 41.0 43.0788530466 95% => OK
Preposition: 40.0 52.1666666667 77% => OK
Nominalization: 5.0 8.0752688172 62% => OK

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1594.0 1977.66487455 81% => OK
No of words: 351.0 407.700716846 86% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.54131054131 4.8611393121 93% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.32839392791 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.65351237286 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 174.0 212.727598566 82% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.495726495726 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 501.3 618.680645161 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.4 1.51630824373 92% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 9.0 9.59856630824 94% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 2.0 4.94265232975 40% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 14.0 20.6003584229 68% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 69.2104524959 48.9658058833 141% => OK
Chars per sentence: 113.857142857 100.406767564 113% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.0714285714 20.6045352989 122% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.07142857143 5.45110844103 93% => OK
Paragraphs: 2.0 4.53405017921 44% => More paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 9.0 11.8709677419 76% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.147016464174 0.236089414692 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0564017721594 0.076458572812 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0582876934157 0.0737576698707 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.119509906287 0.150856017488 79% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0160153752314 0.0645574589148 25% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.5 11.7677419355 106% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 63.02 58.1214874552 108% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.35 10.9000537634 86% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.03 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 70.0 86.8835125448 81% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 14.0 10.002688172 140% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Minimum four paragraphs wanted.

Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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