Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Movies and television have more negative effects than positive effects on the way young people behave. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer
It goes without saying that movies and television affect people directly or indirectly. There has always been a controversial debate on whether they have more advantageous or more disadvantageous especially on youngsters. As far as I am concerned, I believe that they provide more good than bad for us and I have this idea for many reasons, two of which are discussed hereunder.
First and foremost, there are so many informative programs that can affect young people positively. There is no doubt that many programs may have detrimental effects on people’s behavior.But if we look more carefully we will realize that numerous programs such as cooking programs, phycological or scientific ones, news, and even many TV series can be so informative and useful. Take me for example to illustrate this. Last year I wanted that I wanted to get married asnd I did not be able to cook. I was so confused and also I did not have enough money to participate in cooking classes. As I lived alone I had no way to learn cooking and even cooking books could not help me. After a week, one of my friends told me about a cooking program on TV. I decided to try it so I started to watch that program. Only after a month I learned how to cook without paying no money. Now I am skilled enough to cook even for big parties which would not have been possible without this instructive program. Therefore, TV had more positive effects than negative effects on me as a young person.
Another reason which worth mentioning here is that the movies and TV programs provide the opportunity to get acquaintance with a variety of cultures. Movies of each country are usually constructed due to the culture of that society. Although they may be so different from yours, they are a good means for knowing about people’s culture all around the world. Since it is not plausible for all people to travel to different countries because of costs which are so high, movies can have a profound impression in achieving this goal. For instance, I am eager to know about different cultures in Europ since I am planning to immigrate to France in order to continue my education. Besides, I have to learn their language. By watching French movies I got familiar not only with French language but also with their culture and traditions. Even I know the country better than an indigenous person because the movies represent different places in a country. Hence by movies and TV programs, I could become familiar with miscellaneous aspects and challenges of living in French. Consequently, movies help me to get prepared for prevailing over possible difficulties of living abroad.
To make a long story short, one can readily realize that television and movies have more positive effects that negatives effects for youngsters, providing they use them properly. But one question will raise that how to preclude them from incongruous uses of television?
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Suggestion: But
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Suggestion: to cook
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Suggestion: Hence,
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, but, consequently, first, hence, if, look, may, so, therefore, for example, for instance, no doubt, such as
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 11.0 9.8082437276 112% => OK
Conjunction : 18.0 13.8261648746 130% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 59.0 43.0788530466 137% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 61.0 52.1666666667 117% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2432.0 1977.66487455 123% => OK
No of words: 498.0 407.700716846 122% => OK
Chars per words: 4.88353413655 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.72397222731 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.82643914596 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 248.0 212.727598566 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.497991967871 0.524837075471 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 764.1 618.680645161 124% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 3.0 1.86738351254 161% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 26.0 20.6003584229 126% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 50.0415212214 48.9658058833 102% => OK
Chars per sentence: 93.5384615385 100.406767564 93% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.1538461538 20.6045352989 93% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.69230769231 5.45110844103 86% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 4.0 5.5376344086 72% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 4.0 3.85842293907 104% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.216107601282 0.236089414692 92% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0603762872315 0.076458572812 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0693279624695 0.0737576698707 94% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.146514856876 0.150856017488 97% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0471834175806 0.0645574589148 73% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 11.7677419355 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.02 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.97 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 107.0 86.8835125448 123% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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