Nowadays, the modern technology make our life different and challenging, one of the most influential invention is the television.
It is always controversial when we think about the television effect on our society including the adults and the young people. Personally, I disagree with the statement that television has had a negative impact on the young people's behaviors. I feel this way for two main reasons,
which I will explore in the subsequent paragraphs.
To begin with, Televisions at the time being have many educational materials that instill good morals in the children. I can not deny that my opinion has been profoundly influenced by my own experience. I have a four years old son who enjoy watching television most of the time.
I let him watch discovery and Sesame street channels. They have shows that teach kids to say sorry, please, thank you and excuse me in the respective situation.
Surprisingly,my son is using these words, without any efforts, in the correct situation. He also get to know the alphabets, numbers and shapes from these channels.
Had not my son watched sesame street channel, he would not have been able to be polite and behave appropriately in addition to recognizing the alphabet and numbers and yet he is not going to school.
Furthermore, Television has had a positive impact on youth since it has a message to increase the public awareness of the youngster about the benefits of sports and
healthy life style. Moreover, television helps the youth to know the dramatic detrimental effects of drugs and smoking on them.For instance, in Egypt they started a television campaign to advise the youth about the negative consequences of addiction, in this campaign they used "Mohammed Salah",
the popular soccer player as a role model for the youth to encourage them to stop taking drugs. The campaign was very successful and my cousin stopped taking drugs after seeing the commercials on TV.
In light of the above-mentioned reasons, I strongly believe that television has had improved young people's behaviors. This is because it helps them acquire new skills and encourage them to stop smoking and drugs as well.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, furthermore, if, moreover, so, still, well, for instance, i feel, in addition, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 10.0 15.1003584229 66% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 41.0 43.0788530466 95% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 52.1666666667 82% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1830.0 1977.66487455 93% => OK
No of words: 357.0 407.700716846 88% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 5.12605042017 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.34677393335 4.48103885553 97% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.9259630548 2.67179642975 110% => OK
Unique words: 203.0 212.727598566 95% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.56862745098 0.524837075471 108% => OK
syllable_count: 554.4 618.680645161 90% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 21.0 20.1344086022 104% => OK
Sentence length SD: 73.5158575743 48.9658058833 150% => OK
Chars per sentence: 107.647058824 100.406767564 107% => OK
Words per sentence: 21.0 20.6045352989 102% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.76470588235 5.45110844103 106% => OK
Paragraphs: 11.0 4.53405017921 243% => Less paragraphs wanted.
Language errors: 9.0 5.5376344086 163% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.177845513251 0.236089414692 75% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0513180038987 0.076458572812 67% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0620870833621 0.0737576698707 84% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0560789833853 0.150856017488 37% => Maybe some paragraphs are off the topic.
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0644278227235 0.0645574589148 100% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.2 11.7677419355 112% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 50.16 58.1214874552 86% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.5 10.1575268817 113% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.47 10.9000537634 114% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.61 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 89.0 86.8835125448 102% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.4 10.0537634409 103% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Rates: 90.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 27.0 Out of 30
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