Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Governments should
focus their budgets more on environmental protection than on economic
development.
Throughout history, human beings' lives have changed enormously since they inherently have a tendency to improve their lives. Living quality would be an essential factor having remarkable effects on people's lives. While some people believe that government should invest a great deal of money in environmental protection, others hold exactly opposite perspective. In no way can I agree with latter point. There are some reasons, the most outstanding of which will be discussed in the ensuing paragraphs.
To begin with, it is undoubted that so destructive has global warming been that it has had a great negative effects on people's lives, yet above all, it has brought a large amount of harmful effects for people living in our era. To illustrate this fact, one needs only refer to numerous had mental and physical diseases deriving from air pollution. Additionally, global warming phenomena has long term effects on people's lives. Although economic development is important, investing money in protecting environment is more crucial because people needs to be health and then think about economic situation, By way of illustration, the noteworthy intelligible results, which conducted in our country, show that a large number of people are becoming ill due to having pollution environment and their economic situation are becoming difficult.
The second debatable point is that one the one hand, some people believe that if people should improve the economic which people have better lives, yet some people are convinced that when better condition lives can be provided that people have clean environment. In fact, people are able to release their stress and tension when they spend their time in suitable environments such as clean beach. Hence, I strongly agree with the latter point, for I believe that the more people can release their stress, the more their lives will be health and they can enjoy their lives. Take a personal experience as an example there was a time that I had a hard disease, doctor said me you should go out of bustling city to the countryside, and thereby, there, I can recover myself easily due to the presences of clean landscape and river. Not until this incident occurred did I realize the importance of clean environment. For this reason, had I not gone to the countryside, I would not have treated my ill easily.
To make a long story short, by considering all the aforementioned reasons and many others, no one can deny the enormous effects of having clean environment on people’s lifestyle. Not only does it bring them healthy lifestyle, but also they are able to make a clean environment for people living in the future. Thus, were I be a determiner in our country, I would have focused on environment protection, because I strongly believe that it is an obligatory task for government to provide better environment before everything.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 109, Rule ID: A_PLURAL[2]
Message: Don't use indefinite articles with plural words. Did you mean 'effect'?
Suggestion: effect
...g been that it has had a great negative effects on peoples lives, yet above all, it has...
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Message: Possible agreement error -- use past participle here: 'termed'.
Suggestion: termed
...ally, global warming phenomena has long term effects on peoples lives. Although econ...
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Message: Specify a number, remove phrase, or simply use 'many' or 'numerous'
Suggestion: many; numerous
...ich conducted in our country, show that a large number of people are becoming ill due to having p...
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Message: 'Say' cannot be followed by a direct personal object. Did you mean 'told'?
Suggestion: told
... time that I had a hard disease, doctor said me you should go out of bustling city t...
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Line 4, column 321, Rule ID: WERE_VBB[1]
Message: Did you mean 'where' or 'we'?
Suggestion: where; we
... for people living in the future. Thus, were I be a determiner in our country, I wou...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, hence, if, second, so, then, thus, while, in fact, such as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 20.0 15.1003584229 132% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 14.0 9.8082437276 143% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 49.0 43.0788530466 114% => OK
Preposition: 51.0 52.1666666667 98% => OK
Nominalization: 21.0 8.0752688172 260% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2408.0 1977.66487455 122% => OK
No of words: 472.0 407.700716846 116% => OK
Chars per words: 5.10169491525 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.6610686524 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.79171374129 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 236.0 212.727598566 111% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.5 0.524837075471 95% => OK
syllable_count: 765.9 618.680645161 124% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 18.0 20.6003584229 87% => OK
Sentence length: 26.0 20.1344086022 129% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 86.7001359875 48.9658058833 177% => OK
Chars per sentence: 133.777777778 100.406767564 133% => OK
Words per sentence: 26.2222222222 20.6045352989 127% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.66666666667 5.45110844103 86% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 5.0 3.85842293907 130% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 1.0 4.88709677419 20% => More facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.0960181499637 0.236089414692 41% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0350915576016 0.076458572812 46% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0457009855169 0.0737576698707 62% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0611112423761 0.150856017488 41% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0352605285992 0.0645574589148 55% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.7 11.7677419355 133% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 45.09 58.1214874552 78% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.4 10.1575268817 132% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.6 10.9000537634 116% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.57 8.01818996416 107% => OK
difficult_words: 109.0 86.8835125448 125% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.4 10.0537634409 123% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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