Undoubtedly, people mostly spend their free time on exploring social media, and young people are not counted as an exception. As the young children watch movies or other programs on TV, they would get affected even more than other ways of getting influences. Thus, social media would have several merits and demerits for young people regarding these influences. The trade-off between advantages and disadvantages of the whole social media has been investigated by many researchers. When it comes to this point, many critics believe that the disadvantages weight more than the other side. Similarly I personally concur with this claim. In what follows, I will delve into couple of reasons to shed light on my response.
First, social media such as TV and its movies will affect young people's relationships in a wrong way. In general, whenever young children watch a movie, they like to imagine themselves in the same situation and try to imitate what they see in the real world. Most of the movies shown on TV, especially the drama ones, are not sufficient for being imitated by children, but many young people will do the same activities during their life. As a result, their relationships would be affected by the shown programs and movies. As I remember, being merely a fourteen years old child, I watched Friends series every other night. I realized that people should have friends and experience every activity to be found as a cool guy, like one of its characters, who got accustomed to date with various girls. I tried to mimic this behavior in my real life, without thinking about how differences were between my role man's age and mine. To sum up, I went a date, in which I was ridiculed, and this phenomenon resulted in my ensuing life span.
Second, should movies and television have more negative effects than positive ones on young people, the young children will be unhealthier. By and large, young children intentionally are in love with several movies and TV shows, because of watching something new. As a result, they will allocate most of their free time to these shows, and not to have better and healthier activities like sports. It results in having a lazy generation for the whole society, in compared to a young person who spends his/her free time on another useful activities such as arts and etc. Again, on those days, it was plausible for me to use my free time efficiently and took a plan for going to gym. That plan would have made me a better organized person and significantly healthier human being in the whole society.
To recapitulate, we can conclude that demerits of movies and television weight more than these social media's merits. It is because movies and TV not only have badly effects on young people's relationships but also, make them lazy and unhealthy. I strongly propose parents to prohibit their children from overusing TV and other types of social media.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Suggestion: Similarly,
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, regarding, second, similarly, so, thus, in general, such as, as a result, by and large, to sum up
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 24.0 13.8261648746 174% => OK
Relative clauses : 8.0 11.0286738351 73% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 49.0 43.0788530466 114% => OK
Preposition: 64.0 52.1666666667 123% => OK
Nominalization: 4.0 8.0752688172 50% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2416.0 1977.66487455 122% => OK
No of words: 494.0 407.700716846 121% => OK
Chars per words: 4.89068825911 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.71445763274 4.48103885553 105% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.6229444144 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 249.0 212.727598566 117% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.504048582996 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 745.2 618.680645161 120% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 7.0 3.51792114695 199% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 11.0 4.94265232975 223% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 29.6446547552 48.9658058833 61% => OK
Chars per sentence: 100.666666667 100.406767564 100% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.5833333333 20.6045352989 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.95833333333 5.45110844103 91% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 3.0 5.5376344086 54% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.209802632633 0.236089414692 89% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0619293746712 0.076458572812 81% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0685401789325 0.0737576698707 93% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.139311949244 0.150856017488 92% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0338664726158 0.0645574589148 52% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.9 11.7677419355 101% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.08 10.9000537634 102% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.82 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 100.0 86.8835125448 115% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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