Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? Only people who earn a lot of money are successful. Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.

People always confuse about relationship of money and success for decades. Some people believe that earning a lot of money is proving of success. For that reason, in centuries, money has become a goal of life for some people. However, success can bring people money, it is a real fact of life, but money can’t bring successful with it. I don’t believe that earning a lot of money means a successful life for 2 reasons.

First and foremost, there is so many people who are successful of their lives on Earth, but don’t have so much money. For instance, I have heard about a man story, Morrie who was a professor in Boston. He was happy and had tremendously successful life because he didn’t care money, just focus on teaching and learning. Teachers are very successful people because they are teaching and it affects our world. I know a lot of teacher and they are doing their job happily. Some jobs don’t help you to be rich but they have meaning of life inside.

Secondly, some jobs do not have any meaning or they don’t give person happiness. For example, I have a lot of friends who don’t like their jobs, but they do it for only money. Indeed, the idea of the more money you have, the more happiness will come to you is not definitely right. If person doesn’t happy, how can we call this person succeed?

In conclusion, I believe that money and successful are not related with each other. Without a doubt, some jobs can bring you a lot of money so you can be successful and rich together, but unquestionably it is not the general idea of successful meaning.

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Average: 6 (1 vote)
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Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 425, Rule ID: A_LOT_OF_NN[1]
Message: Possible agreement error. The noun teacher seems to be countable; consider using: 'a lot of teachers'.
Suggestion: a lot of teachers
...aching and it affects our world. I know a lot of teacher and they are doing their job happily. S...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
but, first, however, if, second, secondly, so, for example, for instance, in conclusion

Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments

Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 32.0 43.0788530466 74% => OK
Preposition: 28.0 52.1666666667 54% => More preposition wanted.
Nominalization: 1.0 8.0752688172 12% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.

Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1329.0 1977.66487455 67% => OK
No of words: 284.0 407.700716846 70% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.67957746479 4.8611393121 96% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.10515524023 4.48103885553 92% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61911955523 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 139.0 212.727598566 65% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.489436619718 0.524837075471 93% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 414.9 618.680645161 67% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK

A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 2.0 3.08781362007 65% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 4.0 1.86738351254 214% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 3.0 4.94265232975 61% => OK

Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 17.0 20.6003584229 83% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 25.7487191874 48.9658058833 53% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 78.1764705882 100.406767564 78% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.7058823529 20.6045352989 81% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.11764705882 5.45110844103 94% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 15.0 11.8709677419 126% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?

Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.185397283652 0.236089414692 79% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0761376156027 0.076458572812 100% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0462991997112 0.0737576698707 63% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.12577635661 0.150856017488 83% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0252099075418 0.0645574589148 39% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.

Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.0 11.7677419355 76% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.57 10.9000537634 88% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.1 8.01818996416 89% => OK
difficult_words: 48.0 86.8835125448 55% => More difficult words wanted.
linsear_write_formula: 6.0 10.002688172 60% => Linsear_write_formula is low.
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?

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We are expecting: No. of Words: 350 while No. of Different Words: 200
Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:

para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.

So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:

reasons == advantages or

reasons == disadvantages

for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.

or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.


Rates: 60.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 18.0 Out of 30
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