There are different opinions on whether celebrities and their opinions on different matters are more important to younger people or older ones. Despite the fact that some people think older people pay more attention to celebrities and their thoughts, I believe otherwise, maintaining that celebrities have a greater influence on the young generation and adolescents than older people. In what follows, I will delve into the most persuasive reasons to substantiate my perspective.
Without a doubt, the most consequential reason corroborating my stance on this subject is that youth have malleable personalities, which is not fully solidified. Young people can be influenced by other people, particularly celebrities, easily. Drawing from my own experience, I remember when I was young, about 15 years old, I used to watch football a lot, and I knew most of the famous football players of that time. I remember once, a famous television program invited the best player of that period as a special guest. In the program, that football player, who was my favorite player, said that he thought the guitar is the best musical instrument. At that time, I was in the middle of choosing a musical instrument and because of him, I chose the guitar. Therefore, this reason manifests the great impact of celebrities on young people.
Although the previous reason is the first one crossing the mind at first glance, another remarkable point deserving some words here is that today's children and youth have better access to the internet and social media than old people. They follow celebrities on social media applications such as Twitter and Instagram, whereby they become familiar with celebrities' opinions on different issues. Because of the love they have for their favorite, for example, a movie star, they take care of what his idea is about a certain subject and even try to align their notions with his. Thus this point illustrates the fact that celebrities' opinions are so important to the younger generation than older people.
All in all, many people believe that older people are influenced by celebrities and count their thoughts as a matter of importance more than young people. Nonetheless, the foregoing reasons lead us to conclude that youth are the ones influenced by celebrities and their thoughts to a great extent; this is because children and young people have pliable personalities, and they have great access to the internet and modern devices.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, if, nonetheless, so, therefore, thus, for example, such as, to a great extent
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 2.0 9.8082437276 20% => OK
Conjunction : 15.0 13.8261648746 108% => OK
Relative clauses : 15.0 11.0286738351 136% => OK
Pronoun: 45.0 43.0788530466 104% => OK
Preposition: 43.0 52.1666666667 82% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2066.0 1977.66487455 104% => OK
No of words: 400.0 407.700716846 98% => OK
Chars per words: 5.165 4.8611393121 106% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.472135955 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.81988918222 2.67179642975 106% => OK
Unique words: 199.0 212.727598566 94% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.4975 0.524837075471 95% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 629.1 618.680645161 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 2.0 3.51792114695 57% => OK
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 16.0 20.6003584229 78% => Need more sentences. Double check the format of sentences, make sure there is a space between two sentences, or have enough periods. And also check the lengths of sentences, maybe they are too long.
Sentence length: 25.0 20.1344086022 124% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively long.
Sentence length SD: 56.1069013135 48.9658058833 115% => OK
Chars per sentence: 129.125 100.406767564 129% => OK
Words per sentence: 25.0 20.6045352989 121% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.25 5.45110844103 96% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 11.0 11.8709677419 93% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.265936120339 0.236089414692 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0908894614982 0.076458572812 119% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0824180489455 0.0737576698707 112% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.176868230929 0.150856017488 117% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0736688191704 0.0645574589148 114% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 15.4 11.7677419355 131% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 46.1 58.1214874552 79% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 13.0 10.1575268817 128% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.0 10.9000537634 119% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.0 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 79.0 86.8835125448 91% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 12.0 10.002688172 120% => OK
gunning_fog: 12.0 10.0537634409 119% => OK
text_standard: 13.0 10.247311828 127% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 71.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.5 Out of 30
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