Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?In the past it was easier to identify what type of career or job would lead to a secure, successful future.Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Undoubtedly, modern life is much more complicated than the past and human beings have a limited resources for having a good life. In my opinion, nowadays this is easy to find a secure job with better future. I feel this way for two reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
To begin with, nowadays technology can help people to get massive amount of information. In fact, with using some technologic devices such as internet, camputer and cellphone we can easily find out about every career or jobs. In addition, knowing about the future of a pertecular job is not hard by searching in the internet. For example, ten years ago I wanted to be a music teacher which was my dream job. However, I started to searching about this job in google and figured out that althogh the salary of job is high, the position in high schools is very limited. Moreover, each school just wanted one teacher and they all have a teacher to cover music lessons. Actually with using internet and career apps I knew that there is no successful future for me in music teaching career. It wouldn't happen if thre was no internet for searching and, it could have changed my whole life. Thus, modern technology allow people to choose their career carefully with exact prespective.
Furthermore, todays people are well-educated than the past, which help them to evaluate every aspect of a career including security and available positions. According to the history, in the past a small number of people had academic background, and as a result taking a career and knowing about the future of that job was completly blinded.
In addition, people have access to job consultants and can get a lot of useful informations about a job. for instance, in my country after graduation from high school this is mandatory for students to discuss with a superviser who has plenty of knowledge about all careers. As a result before going to university a student know that which job is a perfect fit for her and choose a right study program based on desirable job. This is obvius that with good selection of study program and getting a lot of information during study people can aware about the future of a career.
In conclusion, I strongly feel that nowadays people choose their career with more awareness. this is because technology is a great way to finding facts and because people have extensive knowledge.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, furthermore, however, if, moreover, so, thus, well, for example, for instance, i feel, in addition, in conclusion, in fact, such as, as a result, in my opinion, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 16.0 15.1003584229 106% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 14.0 13.8261648746 101% => OK
Relative clauses : 11.0 11.0286738351 100% => OK
Pronoun: 31.0 43.0788530466 72% => OK
Preposition: 62.0 52.1666666667 119% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1978.0 1977.66487455 100% => OK
No of words: 412.0 407.700716846 101% => OK
Chars per words: 4.80097087379 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.50530610838 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.61791395312 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 212.0 212.727598566 100% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.514563106796 0.524837075471 98% => OK
syllable_count: 628.2 618.680645161 102% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 7.0 9.59856630824 73% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 10.0 4.94265232975 202% => Less preposition wanted as sentence beginnings.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 20.0 20.6003584229 97% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 32.3448604882 48.9658058833 66% => OK
Chars per sentence: 98.9 100.406767564 98% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.6 20.6045352989 100% => OK
Discourse Markers: 9.2 5.45110844103 169% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 7.0 5.5376344086 126% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 2.0 4.88709677419 41% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.165387706782 0.236089414692 70% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0578964843811 0.076458572812 76% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.040297989052 0.0737576698707 55% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0975904186165 0.150856017488 65% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0420099263353 0.0645574589148 65% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.5 11.7677419355 98% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.56 10.9000537634 97% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.19 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 93.0 86.8835125448 107% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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