Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
In the past it was easier to identify what type of career or job would lead to a secure, successful future.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Choosing a suitable job has always been an important thing in people's life. Someone may think it was easier to identify what type of career or job would lead to a secure, successful future in the past. However, I believe that it is more likely to find a job that leads to secureness or success now for the following reasons.
First of all, with the increasing speed of information technology development, we are accessible to a large amount of information about all kinds of jobs and careers. In this case, we can be aware of the working condition and the situation of each jobs to find whether it is suitable for us. For example, my brother had no idea what career to choose after his graduation. So he went online to search the information of the working situation of different jobs. There were also so many posts about hiring employees published online by human resource department of each company, which included as many details as possible about the job for everybody to choose. Thanks to the internet, my brother found that he'd like to be an assistance of an animal doctor since he was so kind and patient to meet the requirement of this job. Besides, he loves animals. He said he was so happy to find this job on the internet. So it is absolutely more possible for us to find a suitable job for ourselves due to the highly advanced information technology.
In addition, there are a series of well developed systems of social welfare allowing us to quit our job to find a more satisfying one without worrying that we might not be living well without salary of our current job. For example, my friend Jack went to an Internet corporation after his graduation. However, he found out that it was so tiring working in that company and finally quit his job to find another one. I asked him that whether he was worried that giving up this current job means that he would lose all his salary. He told me that he could rely on the social welfare to live temporarily until he found another job. So he decided to quit his job as immediately as he found out that this job was not suitable for him. Eventually, he found a satisfying job to be a software engineer in a large company. So it turns out that the well developed social welfare system really helps us to find our most suitable job.
Taking what has been discussed above into consideration, in the past in was not easier to identify the type of career that would lead to a brighter future, since the advanced information technology and the well-developed social welfare policy would assist us to find our most suitable job.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 705, Rule ID: EN_CONTRACTION_SPELLING
Message: Possible spelling mistake found
Suggestion: he'd
... to the internet, my brother found that hed like to be an assistance of an animal d...
^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, besides, finally, first, however, if, may, really, so, well, for example, in addition, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 19.0 15.1003584229 126% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 8.0 9.8082437276 82% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 64.0 43.0788530466 149% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 73.0 52.1666666667 140% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 8.0752688172 211% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2122.0 1977.66487455 107% => OK
No of words: 464.0 407.700716846 114% => OK
Chars per words: 4.57327586207 4.8611393121 94% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64119157421 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.60923298304 2.67179642975 98% => OK
Unique words: 210.0 212.727598566 99% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.452586206897 0.524837075471 86% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 684.9 618.680645161 111% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 12.0 9.59856630824 125% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 1.0 3.51792114695 28% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 5.0 4.94265232975 101% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 22.0 20.1344086022 109% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.648831342 48.9658058833 118% => OK
Chars per sentence: 101.047619048 100.406767564 101% => OK
Words per sentence: 22.0952380952 20.6045352989 107% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.0 5.45110844103 92% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 1.0 5.5376344086 18% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.174726512596 0.236089414692 74% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0665035572183 0.076458572812 87% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0930871267889 0.0737576698707 126% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.175088873731 0.150856017488 116% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.114183697641 0.0645574589148 177% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.1 11.7677419355 94% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.61 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 10.7 10.1575268817 105% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.23 10.9000537634 85% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.52 8.01818996416 94% => OK
difficult_words: 82.0 86.8835125448 94% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.8 10.0537634409 107% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 73.3333333333 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 22.0 Out of 30
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