Do you agree or disagree with the following statement?
In the past, young people depended too much on their parents to make decisions for them; today young people are better able to make decisions about their own lives.
Use specific reasons and examples to support your answer.
Througout history, young people somewhat have been dependent to their parents. A controversial question that is often raised regarding this issue is whether in today’s world young people are more dependant to their parents in comparison with the pasts. Some people possess the conviction that nowadays people are more dependent to parents, while others hold exactly the opposite view and allege that apparently teenagers are not dependant to their parents as well as the past century. I personally contend that people are not as dependant as the past. To substantiate my point of view, the following paragraphs represent a cursory glance at the most outstanding reasons.
The first reason coming to mind to elucidate my standpoint is with this issue that with the advancement of technology alongside the increasing rate of literacy, young people have access to various resources. In other words, parents were the only source of consulting, whereas todays, individuals can find comprehensive information merely by surfing internet. The noteworthy statistics revealed by recent social research conducted in my country show that 70 percent of mand and 63 percent of women are inclined to use information of internet as a guidance for their decisions. Therefore, parents play less important role in making decisions of their children comparing to the past.
The second rationale behind this issue is rooted in the fact that due to the occurred changes in education and occupation, it is not probable that parents can give precise and right information. In other words, owing to the expansion of science and technology and consequecntly, generation of new profissions, parents cannot have enough data about all fields. Thus their knowledge could not fulfill the needs of their children. In order to make this more clear, consider my personal experience. When I was 18 years old, I had to opt a disiplinary to continue my education. At that time, my parents advised me to join civil engineering deparment because they thaught that in this field I would find better jobs. Although I felt tendency to computer science, I joined civil engineering department. By the passing of time I came to the result that that advice was erroneous. Had I searched from more knowledgable people, I would have better choice.
In brief, contemplating all the aforementioned reasons, one soon realizes that young people prefer to use internet instead of parents’ information to make decision.
Grammar and spelling errors:
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Message: This verb is used with the gerund form: 'mind elucidating'.
Suggestion: mind elucidating
...ng reasons. The first reason coming to mind to elucidate my standpoint is with this issue that w...
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Line 3, column 360, Rule ID: SENT_START_CONJUNCTIVE_LINKING_ADVERB_COMMA[1]
Message: Did you forget a comma after a conjunctive/linking adverb?
Suggestion: Thus,
...nnot have enough data about all fields. Thus their knowledge could not fulfill the n...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
apparently, first, regarding, second, so, therefore, thus, well, whereas, while, as to, in brief, as well as, in other words
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 14.0 15.1003584229 93% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 6.0 9.8082437276 61% => OK
Conjunction : 6.0 13.8261648746 43% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 43.0 43.0788530466 100% => OK
Preposition: 61.0 52.1666666667 117% => OK
Nominalization: 17.0 8.0752688172 211% => Less nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2080.0 1977.66487455 105% => OK
No of words: 395.0 407.700716846 97% => OK
Chars per words: 5.26582278481 4.8611393121 108% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.45809453852 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.92314194879 2.67179642975 109% => OK
Unique words: 226.0 212.727598566 106% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.572151898734 0.524837075471 109% => OK
syllable_count: 639.9 618.680645161 103% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 6.0 9.59856630824 63% => OK
Article: 5.0 3.08781362007 162% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 19.0 20.6003584229 92% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 55.9165385175 48.9658058833 114% => OK
Chars per sentence: 109.473684211 100.406767564 109% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.7894736842 20.6045352989 101% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.52631578947 5.45110844103 120% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 8.0 11.8709677419 67% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 3.0 3.85842293907 78% => OK
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 8.0 4.88709677419 164% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.303255913847 0.236089414692 128% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0856914469266 0.076458572812 112% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0769170253346 0.0737576698707 104% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.181795758925 0.150856017488 121% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0714918998441 0.0645574589148 111% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 13.8 11.7677419355 117% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 13.29 10.9000537634 122% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 9.15 8.01818996416 114% => OK
difficult_words: 113.0 86.8835125448 130% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 86.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 26.0 Out of 30
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