Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? In the past, young people depended too much on their parents to make decisions for them; today young people are better able to make decisions about their own lives
With the advancement of society there are lots of things have been changed spontaneously from the past. The increasing knowledge in every field makes people more independent to take the decision now. The smart fon, media coverage, television and other source of knowledge are available to the people which in turn expedite gathering new information from different perspective. A controversial question arises that whether young people are better able to make their own decision for their lives or dependent on their parent. Personally, I concur with the former view for manifold reasons, here I explore my points in the following paragraph.
First of all, children are growing with great care that increases their mental and cognitive ability that facilitate to take decision at their young age. Parents are more cautious about the future of their beloved child, pregnant women trying to eat nutritious food that helps to the development of the child’s brain. At the same time, parents are more serious to their child’s better education from the childhood. These all things together make the young people more smart today to take their decision for their lives. For instance, my mother brought up in a bucolic uneducated family so that she had not got enough care or education facility to increase her knowledge; some time I became astonished to see that she even don’t know about chilly thing which I learned at the age of 10. On the contrary, I have studied in a great school in which I learned many things. At college I knew that which field would be better for carrier development and I can make my decision what field I choose in the future.
Second, new advanced technology makes information available to the people that can solve many problems and helps young people to take decision. People get information from television, paper or other social media through internet. Now information spreads within a second throughout the world. Besides this, young people are more engaged to these types of social media or use internet more which actually make it possible to take the decision. For example, my elder sister first got applied chemistry for her graduation in university. Then she search on online what subject will be better for her better carrier, ultimately she took pharmacy and build her carrier as she completed the study.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that young people are become exceptionally smart nowadays. They have not to rely on their parents for their decision. They get enough care, source of information and make able to keep the decision in their lives.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 3, column 1021, Rule ID: WHITESPACE_RULE
Message: Possible typo: you repeated a whitespace
Suggestion:
...sion what field I choose in the future. Second, new advanced technology makes in...
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Line 5, column 543, Rule ID: HE_VERB_AGR[1]
Message: The pronoun 'she' must be used with a third-person verb: 'searches'.
Suggestion: searches
... her graduation in university. Then she search on online what subject will be better f...
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
actually, besides, first, if, second, so, then, for example, for instance, in conclusion, first of all, on the contrary
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 11.0 15.1003584229 73% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 4.0 9.8082437276 41% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 50.0 43.0788530466 116% => OK
Preposition: 59.0 52.1666666667 113% => OK
Nominalization: 13.0 8.0752688172 161% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2183.0 1977.66487455 110% => OK
No of words: 429.0 407.700716846 105% => OK
Chars per words: 5.08857808858 4.8611393121 105% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.55107846309 4.48103885553 102% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.64207366405 2.67179642975 99% => OK
Unique words: 216.0 212.727598566 102% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.503496503497 0.524837075471 96% => OK
syllable_count: 683.1 618.680645161 110% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 8.0 9.59856630824 83% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 0.0 3.51792114695 0% => More adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 6.0 4.94265232975 121% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 47.0310362138 48.9658058833 96% => OK
Chars per sentence: 103.952380952 100.406767564 104% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.4285714286 20.6045352989 99% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.66666666667 5.45110844103 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 14.0 11.8709677419 118% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 0.0 3.85842293907 0% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 7.0 4.88709677419 143% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.407814071651 0.236089414692 173% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.127250245639 0.076458572812 166% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.125633674148 0.0737576698707 170% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.278792555841 0.150856017488 185% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0829891205421 0.0645574589148 129% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 12.8 11.7677419355 109% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 51.18 58.1214874552 88% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 11.1 10.1575268817 109% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 12.24 10.9000537634 112% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.01 8.01818996416 100% => OK
difficult_words: 92.0 86.8835125448 106% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.5 10.002688172 115% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 12.0 10.247311828 117% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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