Decision making is a crucial ability in everyone's life. Sometimes even one decision can turn one's life upside down. While others may think that young people nowadays can make their own decisions better, I personally believe that teenagers are more dependent to their parents that they were in the past, or at least they should be. I have two main reasons for my opinion:
First, parents have experience, something that can not be acquired easily. Since decision making requires a wide-variety of knowledge, and experience is the best way to know and learn something, parents, who have fairly more experience than their young children, can be a great source of knowledge. For instance, I always go to my father when it comes to financial matters, I can see that my father is a successful man in managing his finances, because he started with almost nothing and now he has achieved a great amount of financial success. He always gives me a lot of useful information about how to keep track of the money I'm using, or what to invest on. I know I can easily rely on his opinions because he has achieved them through experiencing different paths. So as you can see, experience plays an important role in decision making, and young people don't have any.
Second, there are a wider variety of possible future for a child nowadays than there was before. By saying that, I mean that a modern teenager has to choose between more options for his/her future that someone who lived in the past. So decision making is harder than it was before. For example, Imagine a little girl living in a small village where everyone is a farmer, this girl will probably be a farmer in her adulthood. Now imagine a child living in the present. He can potentially be anything, a surgen, a developer, a pharmacist, a poet, anything. Since there are a lot of possibilities, decision making becomes more difficult. This means that children will need more help to choose the path in which their success is better gauranteed. That's the reason that teenagers nowadays need their parents help more that children in the past did.
In conclusion, decision making requires more assistance. young people nowadays are more dependent to their parents because not only they can user their parent's experience, but also they can use their help in choosing between countless paths in front of them. Every teenager should go to their parents to learn how to make decisions for his/her life.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, if, may, second, so, while, as to, at least, for example, for instance, i mean, in conclusion
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 18.0 15.1003584229 119% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 17.0 9.8082437276 173% => OK
Conjunction : 7.0 13.8261648746 51% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 16.0 11.0286738351 145% => OK
Pronoun: 54.0 43.0788530466 125% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 49.0 52.1666666667 94% => OK
Nominalization: 8.0 8.0752688172 99% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2028.0 1977.66487455 103% => OK
No of words: 421.0 407.700716846 103% => OK
Chars per words: 4.81710213777 4.8611393121 99% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.52971130743 4.48103885553 101% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.59079242998 2.67179642975 97% => OK
Unique words: 220.0 212.727598566 103% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.522565320665 0.524837075471 100% => OK
syllable_count: 642.6 618.680645161 104% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 10.0 9.59856630824 104% => OK
Article: 4.0 3.08781362007 130% => OK
Subordination: 4.0 3.51792114695 114% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 20.0 20.1344086022 99% => OK
Sentence length SD: 57.934398744 48.9658058833 118% => OK
Chars per sentence: 96.5714285714 100.406767564 96% => OK
Words per sentence: 20.0476190476 20.6045352989 97% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.28571428571 5.45110844103 97% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 5.0 5.5376344086 90% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 9.0 4.88709677419 184% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.318285448544 0.236089414692 135% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.097426580363 0.076458572812 127% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0757564331016 0.0737576698707 103% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.228656955185 0.150856017488 152% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0820255245168 0.0645574589148 127% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.3 11.7677419355 96% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 59.64 58.1214874552 103% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.9 10.1575268817 97% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.68 10.9000537634 98% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.85 8.01818996416 98% => OK
difficult_words: 86.0 86.8835125448 99% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 11.0 10.002688172 110% => OK
gunning_fog: 10.0 10.0537634409 99% => OK
text_standard: 11.0 10.247311828 107% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 76.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 23.0 Out of 30
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