Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? People behave differently when they aren't in health. Do you agree that health status influences the way people behave? Use specific examples to support your answer.
In recent times, there has been a widespread debate on whether health status has a direct impact on people’s behaviors or not. Personally, I think most unhealthy people suffer from negative behavior that might last for many years unless if they get healthy.
To begin with, cancer patients suffer from severe stress condition due to unfavorable chemotherapy. This stress creates a huge barrier between them and other people. They tend to become isolated from others. For example, I knew my aunt Lana before she had breast cancer. She was very active in the community by participating in most charity activities such as feeding poor people and organizing some custom events in the neighborhood. However, when she got breast cancer and started taking chemotherapy, her behavior completely changed. She became aggressive and lonely all the time. She did not want anybody to see her at all or make any conversation with her. Sadly, she died after two years from starting this bloody chemotherapy. Indeed, my aunt would continue her community activities if she did not have cancer and she was a healthy person.
Another compelling example of the effect of health on people’s attitude is my obesity. Ten years ago, my weight was above 300 bounds. So, my obesity holds me from practicing my daily lifestyle. I was depressed because I was not able to enjoy playing soccer with my friends. Whenever they saw my obesity, they tend to reject me and did not play with them. Furthermore, in my elementary school, most students look at obese students differently; they did not treat fat students very well. These students throw some food and rocks at me because of my obesity. Thus, I used to go home crying and asking my family to change school. Obviously, if I was not obese at that time, my personality would be different.
In conclusion, I strongly agree that health status has a huge impact on people’s attitude.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
furthermore, however, if, look, so, thus, well, for example, i think, in conclusion, such as, to begin with
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 9.0 15.1003584229 60% => More to be verbs wanted.
Auxiliary verbs: 3.0 9.8082437276 31% => OK
Conjunction : 10.0 13.8261648746 72% => OK
Relative clauses : 4.0 11.0286738351 36% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 47.0 43.0788530466 109% => OK
Preposition: 39.0 52.1666666667 75% => OK
Nominalization: 2.0 8.0752688172 25% => More nominalizations (nouns with a suffix like: tion ment ence ance) wanted.
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1602.0 1977.66487455 81% => OK
No of words: 322.0 407.700716846 79% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.9751552795 4.8611393121 102% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.23607819155 4.48103885553 95% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.77141854889 2.67179642975 104% => OK
Unique words: 195.0 212.727598566 92% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.605590062112 0.524837075471 115% => OK
syllable_count: 499.5 618.680645161 81% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.6 1.51630824373 106% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 19.0 9.59856630824 198% => OK
Article: 0.0 3.08781362007 0% => OK
Subordination: 3.0 3.51792114695 85% => OK
Conjunction: 0.0 1.86738351254 0% => OK
Preposition: 4.0 4.94265232975 81% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 22.0 20.6003584229 107% => OK
Sentence length: 14.0 20.1344086022 70% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 30.8999986627 48.9658058833 63% => OK
Chars per sentence: 72.8181818182 100.406767564 73% => OK
Words per sentence: 14.6363636364 20.6045352989 71% => OK
Discourse Markers: 4.86363636364 5.45110844103 89% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 6.0 11.8709677419 51% => More positive sentences wanted.
Sentences with negative sentiment : 11.0 3.85842293907 285% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 5.0 4.88709677419 102% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.108598551908 0.236089414692 46% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.036053318732 0.076458572812 47% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0531939455566 0.0737576698707 72% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.104350125137 0.150856017488 69% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0680589221054 0.0645574589148 105% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 9.3 11.7677419355 79% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 57.27 58.1214874552 99% => OK
smog_index: 8.8 6.10430107527 144% => OK
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.8 10.1575268817 87% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 11.01 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.16 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 86.8835125448 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 7.0 10.002688172 70% => OK
gunning_fog: 7.6 10.0537634409 76% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 66.6666666667 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 20.0 Out of 30
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