traveling is an inextricable part of human life in our contemporary lives. As we see in our families, people are used to traveling regularly. If it is asked whether or not traveling in own countries is beneficial for people more than traveling to foreign ones, due to the controversial nature of this question, there is not a general argument on this issue. I am, however, to a great extent of conviction that traveling abroad is more useful and beneficial. The following paragraphs will aptly substantiate my personal instance.
The main reason is that with traveling abroad you can see and get familiar with different cultures around the world. In other words, people who have the same nationality almost have the same culture. As a result, you can't see diverse cultures by traveling in your own country. For example, I remember two months ago I traveled to Istanbul, Turkey, it was a crowded city, which has many tourists from all over the world. On that journey, I could find four new friends from four different cultures. It means that I got familiar with a lot of new traditions and customs. As you can see, I couldn't have cultivated those relations, if I didn't travel abroad.
Another reason is that traveling to different countries will make you sophisticated and experienced. It means, when people travel abroad, especially with their families, they should accept more responsibility. As an outcome, they will become more sophisticated. For instance, in the memory that I told you, one of my friends wanted to buy an alcoholic local beer. I couldn't trust anybody in Turkey and I convinced him not to buy local beer. The day after that we heard one of the Iranian people, who had drunk local beer, became blind. My friend was surprised due to this incident. In general, we couldn't have obtained those experiences, if we didn't go to a foreign country.
To put the issue into perspective, in spite of the fact that some may think traveling in their own country is beneficial more than traveling to a foreign country, I believe going to foreign trips is more useful. Not only will people get familiar with different cultures, but also they will become more worldly and sophisticated. In the end, I suggest people who haven't traveled abroad, experience that once.
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Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, however, if, may, so, for example, for instance, in general, as a result, in other words, in spite of, to a great extent
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 12.0 15.1003584229 79% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 10.0 9.8082437276 102% => OK
Conjunction : 8.0 13.8261648746 58% => More conjunction wanted.
Relative clauses : 14.0 11.0286738351 127% => OK
Pronoun: 51.0 43.0788530466 118% => OK
Preposition: 44.0 52.1666666667 84% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1892.0 1977.66487455 96% => OK
No of words: 387.0 407.700716846 95% => More content wanted.
Chars per words: 4.88888888889 4.8611393121 101% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.43534841618 4.48103885553 99% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.80300901956 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 202.0 212.727598566 95% => More unique words wanted.
Unique words percentage: 0.521963824289 0.524837075471 99% => OK
syllable_count: 593.1 618.680645161 96% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 3.0 3.08781362007 97% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.51792114695 227% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 1.0 1.86738351254 54% => OK
Preposition: 8.0 4.94265232975 162% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 23.0 20.6003584229 112% => OK
Sentence length: 16.0 20.1344086022 79% => The Avg. Sentence Length is relatively short.
Sentence length SD: 41.5418799319 48.9658058833 85% => OK
Chars per sentence: 82.2608695652 100.406767564 82% => OK
Words per sentence: 16.8260869565 20.6045352989 82% => OK
Discourse Markers: 5.69565217391 5.45110844103 104% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 9.0 5.5376344086 163% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 10.0 11.8709677419 84% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 2.0 3.85842293907 52% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 11.0 4.88709677419 225% => Less facts, knowledge or examples wanted.
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.321392766594 0.236089414692 136% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0863098176162 0.076458572812 113% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0702857824009 0.0737576698707 95% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.205351331227 0.150856017488 136% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0462332610521 0.0645574589148 72% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.0 11.7677419355 85% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 63.7 58.1214874552 110% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 8.4 10.1575268817 83% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.79 10.9000537634 99% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.61 8.01818996416 95% => OK
difficult_words: 78.0 86.8835125448 90% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.5 10.002688172 85% => OK
gunning_fog: 8.4 10.0537634409 84% => OK
text_standard: 9.0 10.247311828 88% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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