There is no shortage of opinion on how indispensable is the role of happiness in our lives. In this regard, some are of the opinion that helping others would bring more consent for us, while others thoroughly disagree with this idea. Regarding this controversial issue, I subscribe to the idea that happiness is more about helping ourselves. I feel this way for a couple of reasons, which I will develop in subsequent paragraphs.
First of all, If people do not help themselves in the first place, they will lose their mind relaxation and will get sorrowful. People can help many individuals, but if they do not assist themselves in finding remedies for their challenging obstacles, they will not benefit from mind relaxation. Hence, the significant step in getting happy is to free our brains of various stress and tensions. I have to admit that my personal experience profoundly impacts my opinion on this matter. Once in college, we had to prepare a final project about mathematics. Since I was endowed with great knowledge in writing codes on mathematical software, my friends asked me to help them. I patiently helped all of them to write their project. In contrast, I could not allocate the required time for doing my own project. As a result, I could not get the expected grade, and I got upset about it. Had I helped myself doing the project first, I would have gotten a more acceptable grade, and I would have been happier.
secondly, helping ourselves outweighs helping others because one cannot concentrate on aiding others while struggling with the sense of dissatisfaction. People who have a lot of concerns, are mainly distracted by their own hardships and are trying to solve their thought-provoking issues. Moreover, in the long run, these people will get sullen and reluctant to communicate more with others because they have several concerns in their minds. Hence, unhappy people cannot help others to solve their hardnesses. Drawing from my own experience, when I was in high school, I was afflicted by depression due to my imperfect and obese appearance. I did not want to communicate with my peers because I was feeling insecure and miserable. Once my friend asked me to reconcile her with her sister, but I could not talk with her sister because I was feeling shy and afraid of being judged by my look. Had I not have substantial problems, I would have helped my friend solve her trouble.
In conclusion, In light of the reasons mentioned, I believe that helping ourselves in the first stage would be more beneficial for us and will bring more joyfulness. I feel this way because by helping ourselves not only can we enjoy more peace of mind, but also we can concentrate on solving others’ problems better.
Essay evaluations by e-grader
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 901, Rule ID: ADVISE_VBG[9]
Message: The verb 'help' is used with infinitive: 'to do' or 'do'.
Suggestion: to do; do
...got upset about it. Had I helped myself doing the project first, I would have gotten ...
^^^^^
Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Secondly
... grade, and I would have been happier. secondly, helping ourselves outweighs helping ot...
^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, if, look, moreover, regarding, second, secondly, so, while, i feel, in conclusion, in contrast, as a result, first of all, in the first place
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 9.8082437276 194% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 77.0 43.0788530466 179% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 62.0 52.1666666667 119% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2270.0 1977.66487455 115% => OK
No of words: 466.0 407.700716846 114% => OK
Chars per words: 4.87124463519 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64618479453 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8063681619 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 230.0 212.727598566 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.49356223176 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 697.5 618.680645161 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 9.59856630824 177% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.0473526463 48.9658058833 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.5833333333 100.406767564 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.4166666667 20.6045352989 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.91666666667 5.45110844103 127% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.145810545959 0.236089414692 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0465824109854 0.076458572812 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0358487422107 0.0737576698707 49% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0870775225946 0.150856017488 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0351575683343 0.0645574589148 54% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 11.7677419355 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.97 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.17 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 106.0 86.8835125448 122% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.
Grammar and spelling errors:
Line 2, column 901, Rule ID: ADVISE_VBG[9]
Message: The verb 'help' is used with infinitive: 'to do' or 'do'.
Suggestion: to do; do
...got upset about it. Had I helped myself doing the project first, I would have gotten ...
^^^^^
Line 3, column 1, Rule ID: UPPERCASE_SENTENCE_START
Message: This sentence does not start with an uppercase letter
Suggestion: Secondly
... grade, and I would have been happier. secondly, helping ourselves outweighs helping ot...
^^^^^^^^
Transition Words or Phrases used:
also, but, first, hence, if, look, moreover, regarding, second, secondly, so, while, i feel, in conclusion, in contrast, as a result, first of all, in the first place
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 15.0 15.1003584229 99% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 19.0 9.8082437276 194% => OK
Conjunction : 13.0 13.8261648746 94% => OK
Relative clauses : 7.0 11.0286738351 63% => More relative clauses wanted.
Pronoun: 77.0 43.0788530466 179% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 62.0 52.1666666667 119% => OK
Nominalization: 6.0 8.0752688172 74% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 2270.0 1977.66487455 115% => OK
No of words: 466.0 407.700716846 114% => OK
Chars per words: 4.87124463519 4.8611393121 100% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.64618479453 4.48103885553 104% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.8063681619 2.67179642975 105% => OK
Unique words: 230.0 212.727598566 108% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.49356223176 0.524837075471 94% => More unique words wanted or less content wanted.
syllable_count: 697.5 618.680645161 113% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 17.0 9.59856630824 177% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 5.0 3.51792114695 142% => OK
Conjunction: 5.0 1.86738351254 268% => Less conjunction wanted as sentence beginning.
Preposition: 7.0 4.94265232975 142% => OK
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 24.0 20.6003584229 117% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 34.0473526463 48.9658058833 70% => OK
Chars per sentence: 94.5833333333 100.406767564 94% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.4166666667 20.6045352989 94% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.91666666667 5.45110844103 127% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 2.0 5.5376344086 36% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 12.0 11.8709677419 101% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 8.0 3.85842293907 207% => Less negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.145810545959 0.236089414692 62% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0465824109854 0.076458572812 61% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0358487422107 0.0737576698707 49% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0870775225946 0.150856017488 58% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0351575683343 0.0645574589148 54% => OK
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 11.2 11.7677419355 95% => OK
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 10.97 10.9000537634 101% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 8.17 8.01818996416 102% => OK
difficult_words: 106.0 86.8835125448 122% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
---------------------
Note: the e-grader does NOT examine the meaning of words and ideas. VIP users will receive further evaluations by advanced module of e-grader and human graders.