Do you agree or disagree with the following statement? “People should keep trying to reach their goals, even if they seem impossible to achieve.” Use specific reasons and examples to explain your position
Almost everyone in the world has a few long term goals they want to achieve. Personally, I believe that we should not give up on those goals, even if it seems like we will never reach them. I feel this way for two reasons, which I will explore in the following essay.
First of all, we can learn valuable new skills as we work to achieve impossible targets. Even if we don’t succeed, our determination and diligence might help us develop abilities that will be useful later in our life. My own personal experience is compelling evidence of this. When I was in high school, my dream was to be a professional writer and to publish a bestselling science fiction novel. As a result, I spent every evening writing new stories. I gave a few of them to my teachers, and they provided feedback regarding my grammar, vocabulary and structure. Even though I worked extremely hard, I never managed to get any of my fiction published. However, I did learn a lot about how to effectively and concisely express complex ideas in writing. Thanks to these skills, I eventually found work as a technical writer at an engineering firm, where I have earned a substantial salary for the past decade.
Secondly, people who remain dedicated to goals that seem impossible sometimes meet individuals who are willing to help them. Successful people could notice their hard work and be impressed by it. For instance, when my brother was young he wanted to be a computer programmer and work for a prestigious technology firm like Intel or Microsoft. Given his lack of academic credentials and work experience, most of his friends thought he would never get any serious job offers. Nevertheless, he spent all of his free time writing his own software, which he uploaded to his personal website. One day, a senior manager at Intel noticed one of his projects and was extremely impressed by his work. As a result, he gave my brother a job offer even though he lacked most of the formal qualifications for the position.
In conclusion, I strongly believe that we should always try to make our dreams come true, even if the odds are against us. This is because we will learn many new things along the way, and we might be lucky enough to encounter people who will help us reach our targets.
Transition Words or Phrases used:
first, however, if, nevertheless, regarding, second, secondly, so, as to, for instance, i feel, in conclusion, as a result, first of all
Attributes: Values AverageValues Percentages(Values/AverageValues)% => Comments
Performance on Part of Speech:
To be verbs : 13.0 15.1003584229 86% => OK
Auxiliary verbs: 12.0 9.8082437276 122% => OK
Conjunction : 11.0 13.8261648746 80% => OK
Relative clauses : 12.0 11.0286738351 109% => OK
Pronoun: 64.0 43.0788530466 149% => Less pronouns wanted
Preposition: 42.0 52.1666666667 81% => OK
Nominalization: 10.0 8.0752688172 124% => OK
Performance on vocabulary words:
No of characters: 1872.0 1977.66487455 95% => OK
No of words: 399.0 407.700716846 98% => OK
Chars per words: 4.69172932331 4.8611393121 97% => OK
Fourth root words length: 4.46933824581 4.48103885553 100% => OK
Word Length SD: 2.70614259949 2.67179642975 101% => OK
Unique words: 228.0 212.727598566 107% => OK
Unique words percentage: 0.571428571429 0.524837075471 109% => OK
syllable_count: 584.1 618.680645161 94% => OK
avg_syllables_per_word: 1.5 1.51630824373 99% => OK
A sentence (or a clause, phrase) starts by:
Pronoun: 15.0 9.59856630824 156% => OK
Article: 1.0 3.08781362007 32% => OK
Subordination: 8.0 3.51792114695 227% => Less adverbial clause wanted.
Conjunction: 2.0 1.86738351254 107% => OK
Preposition: 1.0 4.94265232975 20% => More preposition wanted as sentence beginning.
Performance on sentences:
How many sentences: 21.0 20.6003584229 102% => OK
Sentence length: 19.0 20.1344086022 94% => OK
Sentence length SD: 27.7790929394 48.9658058833 57% => The essay contains lots of sentences with the similar length. More sentence varieties wanted.
Chars per sentence: 89.1428571429 100.406767564 89% => OK
Words per sentence: 19.0 20.6045352989 92% => OK
Discourse Markers: 6.47619047619 5.45110844103 119% => OK
Paragraphs: 4.0 4.53405017921 88% => OK
Language errors: 0.0 5.5376344086 0% => OK
Sentences with positive sentiment : 16.0 11.8709677419 135% => OK
Sentences with negative sentiment : 1.0 3.85842293907 26% => More negative sentences wanted.
Sentences with neutral sentiment: 4.0 4.88709677419 82% => OK
What are sentences with positive/Negative/neutral sentiment?
Coherence and Cohesion:
Essay topic to essay body coherence: 0.109236910726 0.236089414692 46% => OK
Sentence topic coherence: 0.0340315730841 0.076458572812 45% => OK
Sentence topic coherence SD: 0.0341579876079 0.0737576698707 46% => Sentences are similar to each other.
Paragraph topic coherence: 0.0756558293173 0.150856017488 50% => OK
Paragraph topic coherence SD: 0.0281068271625 0.0645574589148 44% => Paragraphs are similar to each other. Some content may get duplicated or it is not exactly right on the topic.
Essay readability:
automated_readability_index: 10.2 11.7677419355 87% => Automated_readability_index is low.
flesch_reading_ease: 60.65 58.1214874552 104% => OK
smog_index: 3.1 6.10430107527 51% => Smog_index is low.
flesch_kincaid_grade: 9.5 10.1575268817 94% => OK
coleman_liau_index: 9.92 10.9000537634 91% => OK
dale_chall_readability_score: 7.94 8.01818996416 99% => OK
difficult_words: 85.0 86.8835125448 98% => OK
linsear_write_formula: 8.0 10.002688172 80% => OK
gunning_fog: 9.6 10.0537634409 95% => OK
text_standard: 10.0 10.247311828 98% => OK
What are above readability scores?
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Better to have 5 paragraphs with 3 arguments. And try always support/against one side but compare two sides, like this:
para 1: introduction
para 2: reason 1. address both of the views presented for reason 1
para 3: reason 2. address both of the views presented for reason 2
para 4: reason 3. address both of the views presented for reason 3
para 5: conclusion.
So how to find out those reasons. There is a formula:
reasons == advantages or
reasons == disadvantages
for example, we can always apply 'save time', 'save/make money', 'find a job', 'make friends', 'get more information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
or we can apply 'waste time', 'waste money', 'no job', 'make bad friends', 'get bad information' as reasons to all essay/speaking topics.
Rates: 70.0 out of 100
Scores by essay e-grader: 21.0 Out of 30
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